Open Poetry #8 |
Maybe |
BSC
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since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Sitting out under the stars On this first night of July, Thoughts were running wildly, As I silently wondered why. It seemed it all was upside down, Or maybe inside out, My voice was but a whisper, When I really wanted to shout. Maybe the tall was really short, Was I running or standing still, Maybe the dog was really a cat, Was that a duck or a finch with a bill? Were those really stars falling, Or just floaters in my eye, When I look down and see the grass, Am I sure it's not the sky? Is this a sea of confusion, Or pond of tranquility, Am I really sure where I am, Or if I'm even me? Maybe it's really winter, And I've been sitting in snow, Maybe if I just go to bed, When I wake tomorrow I'll know. |
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midnightblues Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 1597Singapore |
Hello, I'm a new member...just a 18 yr old chinese gal... I'm not that good with poems though...but I really love the beauty in their language...hey your poem really describes the feelings of uncertainty...simple language, honest and realistic...inspired me *S* |
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Kellsue Member
since 2000-05-06
Posts 210Waukesha, WI USA |
Very interesting...asking the philosophical "why". Good work! ~Kelly ~Kellsue Reflect upon your present blessings-of which every man has many-not on your past misfortunes, of which all men have some. ~Charles Dickens We make a living by what we get, but we make a life by what we give. ~Winston Churchill |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Bon-Bon~ It's okay, hon ... It'll be okay in the morning ! Love seeing your humorous light ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
This is terrfic!!! Flows so well and simply. I love it! Love and hugs, Lizzie "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Maybe in the morning all will be as it seems Maybe the sun will be just that as upon you it's rays do beam Maybe you'll be woken by the bark of neighbours dog And know that thats what it is and not some god damn mog Sorry this is where I got stuck, my humble attempt to try to humour you..sorry Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"Is this a sea of confusion, Or pond of tranquility, Am I really sure where I am, Or if I'm even me?" My favorite questions BSC! Loved the flow and sentiments in this ... why ... who indeed? Well done! Best wishes, /Kit |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Dearest Bonnie: Confusion reigns! Beautiful poem, and we all go through these times of confusion, I know I have. Just hold on to your wonderful sense of humor and your beautiful faith and you'll wake up to the lovely Bonnie that you are! love, Ellie Summers haunting melody that awakens the butterflies, calling them to join the dance in their silent song of praise to God. ellie LeJeune |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Beautifully penned poem! "Why" is one of the hardest words to ask, because most of the time all you receive is silence never knowing the answer, leading to more confusion. This poem reiterated that perfectly Take care, Melissa Honeybee The beauty of poetry gives me wings to fly |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Maybe is the key. Maybe can come true. Maybe I should tell you this is an excellent poem, maybe I should keep silent. But I think I'll tell you..........maybe. Very well done! |
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BSC
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since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Midnightblues - Welcome, and thanks for reading, glad you liked it. Kelly - Thanks, I appreciate your reply. Marge - You're right, much better this morning..... ESP - Thanks, glady you enjoyed. Tracie66 - Love your humor, don't be sorry, I loved it. Kit - Those questions seem never ending, thanks. Ellie - A beautiful day, clear skies, bright sun, how could I feel any confusion!!! Thanks for your kind reply. Melissa - Thanks so much. ethome - Thanks, maybe is the key. Glad you liked. Bonnie |
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