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Macy
New Member

since 2000-03-18

Posts 6
USA

0 posted 2000-07-01 07:43 PM

"Breakdown"

Each day
The pain remains -
Never ceasing to fade away
The heartache stays with her
Day after day

Like a diamond in the sky,
She used to shine

But as clouds, her emotions
cover the brightness
Where once her personality
radiated with a special glow

As her head hangs low
It painfully falls into her trembling hands

Soaked with sadness
Her eyes release silent tears

She weeps,
Hardly able to breathe

Like rain drops, her tears
are unable to stop
One by one
They so carelessly drop

Her petite body quivers
Uncontrollably
So cold and so alone

Her world crumbles
As she tries to get up
But stumbles

A broken heart shatters to pieces
As her lifeless body crashes to the floor

Her world so dark
Her life falling apart

She grimaces at the images...
Her memory plays like a movie,
Back to the first day they met

Him: As handsome as can be
She: As pretty as a doll.
Wonders if it is her turn to fall in love...

Their first date
Their first kiss
Their last day
To that last embrace -

After all the heartache
All the tears
After all the pain
She searches for what remains

A soul within
She dare finds
There all along
Time after time

With courage, she manages to open her
weary, yet beautiful blue eyes

From this moment on
Her life has changed
The future is hers

Each day
She will not only strive to live the length
of her life...
She will cherish the width

She has survived
She is, with great honor -
alive.

jennie may*
Member

since 2000-06-17

Posts 122

1 posted 2000-07-01 07:49 PM

I like it---it reminds me of myself and many people that I know...beautiful work

Macy
New Member

since 2000-03-18

Posts 6
USA

2 posted 2000-07-01 07:54 PM

Thanks

I was wondering if the whole things flows - especially the ending little paragraph. Does it all sound okay?

EagleOne
Member Elite

since 2000-03-07

Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...

3 posted 2000-07-01 08:06 PM

It sounds great to me. Welcome!

God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown

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