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The Point |
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Isabelle Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 176Indiana |
Don't ask why I posted this I don't really like this poem but I still wanted to know your opinions don't be afraid to eat it up. I'm to the point, The point of no return I must continue Keep walking that path The path full of pain Path of tears If you feel you can help Be free to try But I'm at the Point I'm standing at the bottom With an empty heart Waiting for one person to reach out To pull me from this black hole One not scared to get too close One of love and caring "Poetry is the music of the souls, and above all, of great and feeling souls." ~Voltaire~ |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
We've all been there before! I dont think it was bad at all, It was direct and told us about yourself a little bit. Just keep writing to free your emotions. Love, ,._-=-~^* Jeremy *^~-=-_., |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
just like jeremy said alot of us have been there at one point in our life...and i liked this one...your telling us your emotions and how you feel...isnt that good??? ~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~ |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
opps...i made a mistake...sorry!!!< !signature--> ~*~TrUe LoVe Is ThE cLoSeSt ThInG tO hEaVen~*~ [This message has been edited by ERIN (edited 08-09-2000).] |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I like they way this got my attention fast and kept it. Great work  |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
that wasn't bad at all, it was good. Keep writing. ~¤*¤~iF yOu LuV sOmEoNe, PuT ThEiR nAmE iN a CiRcLe, iNsTeAd Of A hEaRt, BcUz HeArTz CaN bReAk, BuT CiRcLeZ gO oN 4eVeR~¤*¤~ |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
this was really good by the way, very nicely put. just cause it's short doesn't mean you haven't conveyed your idea fully and in wonderful form...don't hesitate to post, we wanna read more! salooma |
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