Teen Poetry #3 |
Midnight Wish 2 |
Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
Here ya'll go. I know it's short, but I didn't want to clutter it up. Midnight Wish 2 Now I'll try again to sleep. I pray to find a heart to keep. If I cry when I awake... I pray those tears for her take. Now I toss and turn again. I pray this night will find and end. If my eyes will rest of fear, I pray I'll dream the beauty here. Jeremy D. Halstead 8-7-00 "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." |
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Lone Insomniac Junior Member
since 2000-08-05
Posts 45 |
nice poem !!! it's not that long...luckily...that's something I have to work on =( I think this one is better as your 4 letter poem !!! see yaaaa -robin- |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
Hey there Jeremy, I loved it, even though it was short. Can't wait to read what you have next. Luv always, Chel "True friends stab you in the front" "True love last forever" |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
Hey....very nice I must say! And just as beautiful! Keep on writing that's the way it should be! Salooma |
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Lurdburger Junior Member
since 2000-08-05
Posts 39Carlisle, Cumbria, England |
I like this... nice short sentiment, like you'd put in a card for someone. Very personal and stuff |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
wow jeremy!!!this is really good...i hope that you end up staying here with us...but it you stop writing i will still be your friend...keep in touch!!! ~No one is worth your tears, and the one who is wont make you cry~ ~We all cant be stars but we all can twinkle~ |
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SweetPoet17 Member
since 2000-08-04
Posts 108 |
Jeremy I loved it sweetheart it was beautiful... -jessica- I have good news for you, I am beginning to feel so much better, and move on with my life. Its people like you I am thankful for, people who care. |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Jeremy, I couldn't be more happy to see that you are still writing! I love your work...it gives me such inspiration and an insight to your heart amd soul. As for a heart, well you can have mine if you want. hehe...you know you've had it for a while. You're such a sweet heart, I don't know what i would do with out you. Knowingyou these last couple of months has really been such a joy. Thank you so much for everything Jer! Don't forget to call me. Love ya bunches. < !signature-->Love Always ~*~Jessica Lynn~*~ ~*~Why is it that love always starts with a hug, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear?~*~ [This message has been edited by StarPryncess17 (edited 08-08-2000).] |
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The_Driven Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 60 |
Sometimes its best to keep things short n sweet. This was a nice short-poem, and i enjoyed reading it. Good job! |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
I agree, it was short and sweet. Good rhymes and form. Keep it up! ,._-=-~^* Jeremy *^~-=-_., |
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LoveBug
Moderator
Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Both of your "moonlight wishes" are beautiful pieces, my friend. This seems like a hard situation, and I hope writing these helped your pain. I also hope that you never ever stop writing. You have great talent, and I hate seeing talent going to waste! I hope you will always write, and grace us with the presence of your beautiful work! "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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