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In One Moment.. |
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SweetPoet17 Member
since 2000-08-04
Posts 108 |
In One Moment… In one Moment… A breathe of hesitation… A thought of ignorance… A decision quickly spoken… Motions of uncertainty… Feelings of casualty… Breathes taken ever so lightly… Expressions of the vision… Feelings of arrival… A smile emerged… Minutes of laughter… A smile of a stranger… Feelings growing rapidly soon after… No longer did I feel that no one understands… For that smile of delight… Was brought upon by the touch of his hand… Pain erupted from each word… I did not hesitate… For he heard… He cared… He left me with a sorrowful frown… He shared… The feeling of loss… The feeling of addiction… The feeling of pain… I listened… I didn’t want to go… Just look at the rain… And never let him go… For in one moment… My life changed… That night in the rain… He made me realize I can wash away the pain… |
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Squirter Junior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 17Minnesota |
Great! I love it! Love is great...but it can be painful...you've written about that well...keep it up! Love Always, Nicole |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey this was really great. Good work. ~Carly Better days are on the way, my friend, just a ways on down the line. I believe that just around the bend, everythings gonna be fine... |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This poem has a lot of feeling in it. I think it was very good! You can totally get a sense of how much effect a moment can have on you. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
And never let him go… This is how I felt about someone in my past...He got with my best friend while he was with me...I didnt want to let him go though...I grew so attached...But then I finally did...And I found someone that I trust so much and love with all my heart...So I guess I can say it was worth it all...But not the heartbreak... This was really good...Im glad that you shared it with us...I hope to see more...  It TaKeS a MiNuTe To LiKe SoMeOnE, aN hOuR tO hAvE a CrUsH oN sOmEoNe & A dAy To FaLl In LoVe, BuT iT tAkEs A lIfEtImE tO fOrGeT sOmEoNe. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I liked the postive ending to this, great work  |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Hello, very well written. i liked it a lot!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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