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To America w/love |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
"Soon we will be in America" said the father to his family of four. They boarded the raft,and they set off, on that balmy night at coast. Six days later, along came the coast guard. They found four bodies among the wrekage at a spot along the bay. Although they never made it across, the officers brought them ashore, for a burial, flowers galore. "Soon they'll be in America." Said the captain in a sober tone. as they neared the shore. -dedicated to all those who never made it across- |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
A very thought-provoking and sorrowful topic Jose ... your thoughts flowed nicely in this verse, well done!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Jose, this is a wonderful piece. It's sad to think of what people do to get to this country. We take it for granted. Thank you for sharing this with us. "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
Very nice tribute. Keep up the good work. Chel "True friends stab you in the front" "True love last forever" |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
this is by far my favorite poem by you...i liked it alot...keep up the good work buddy... ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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TearsOfPearls Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 322Vereeniging, South-Africa |
This is a lovely poem with a wonderful thought behind it. Keep up the good stuff. Waves...amazing hey? Wind blowing over smoothe ocean water creates shear. The longer the wind blows, and the futher the fetch, the more energy gets transferred from the wind to the water. What started off as a breeze 1 000km away, ends up as a glass-faced barrel at some far off beach. |
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Kittie Member
since 2000-07-08
Posts 103 |
Great poem, and definitely something imagrants can relate to. Keep up the great work. |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
thanks everybody, I'm glad that you liked my poem. I got the idea from a poetry book that I bought in Miami's little Havana neighborhood. The book I bought was writen in a raft, by a refugee, who was coming to America. The raft capsized, and wreaked out on the open sea. The poetry was found amidst the wreakage. |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
thanks everybody, I'm glad that you liked my poem. I got the idea from a poetry book that I bought in Miami's little Havana neighborhood. The book I bought was writen in a raft, by a refugee, who was coming to America. The raft capsized, and wreaked out on the open sea. The poetry was found amidst the wreakage. The author never made it across. |
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The_Driven Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 60 |
Very nice poem. Well written. it also attracts attention, because these things actually happen in real life.... bottom line, nice job, keep up the good work. |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
Great story...well story in poem form. I really enjoyed this one...makes you wonder what America really is. Salooma |
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Le Capitan de L'Amour Member
since 2000-07-15
Posts 60 |
Jose all immigrants face a hard time comming to America, but I never knew how bad it was for some of us. |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
thanks for reading my poem. I'm glad you all liked it. |
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