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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina 
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She's haunted by your face The memory of your touch Your words she can't erase Your love, your hope, your lies She laughs when we can hear But her smile is of stone She's chased by unseen fear And at night we hear her cries The girl she was is gone You took with you her soul You may think you have won But you've only lit the fire No matter where you are You'll always feel her pain Which like a raging war Howls outside your desire If I could read your mind, What would you say? Would it take my breath away? *Human |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
very intresting...i like your work alot...keep up the good work... ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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sherm Member
since 2000-07-21
Posts 94Evansville,IN |
very deep i like it a lot keep up the good work |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
Hey, my thanks to you both for praising my work. In a way I wrote this in the third person about myself, but I also made the situation much more dramatic than it was for the sake of powerful wording. So don't think I'm really a shattered individual, guys. I'm just.......haunted. HA! Bye now. *~Meredith~* If I could read your mind, What would you say? Would it take my breath away? *Human |
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TearsOfPearls Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 322Vereeniging, South-Africa |
Another work of art. I am in awe of your talent. I have treid writing one or two poems in the thhird person about myself, no with the same success, hehe, but I tried. Wonderful poem, keep the good stuff rolling. Waves...amazing hey? Wind blowing over smoothe ocean water creates shear. The longer the wind blows, and the futher the fetch, the more energy gets transferred from the wind to the water. What started off as a breeze 1 000km away, ends up as a glass-faced barrel at some far off beach. |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
Nice work. I enjoyed reading this. Keep up the great work. Chel "True friends stab you in the front" "True love last forever" |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
great read filled with emotion....it flows very nicely. I enjoyed it a lot! Salooma |
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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
This is very.....haunting. Excellent job at displaying the theme. good show.  jason Just as soon as I belong, then it's time I disapear... -Metallica- |
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Tara Member
since 2000-02-21
Posts 76Minnesota |
i really like this poem. i especially liked the rhyme scheme you used. i've never seen that before. keep up the good work. Tara |
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