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The_Driven
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since 2000-07-11
Posts 60


0 posted 2000-07-24 02:43 AM



"I'am alone.
I'am depressed.
I'am in alot of pain."

No one to share in my misery.
No one i can talk to about my pain.
No one to keep me company.
No one but the rain.

Suddenly, im sinking...
A Languid feeling overtakes me.
When my eyes finally open next,
I find that i'am free.

Free from the same depressing shadows,
and the misery that binds me to these things.
Floating, gliding through paradise,
on crystal-colored wings.

Ah! here is the life!
Free of pain, free of misery.
Free of this plague called stryfe.

However, the more im here,
the more i see...
This fantastic life is not meant to be.

As much as i try to deny it,
as much as it feels good to be free.
The reality of it is:
A cold, and unforgiving life,
is the only thing awaiting me.

I try not to wake up,
i hold onto my dreams tight.
For if i were to let go,
then  i would surely lose the fight.

I cling to my dream,
desperately scraped together to help a dying spirit.
But as much as i try to fight,
i can sense the end of my dream nearing.

What was once warm like the sun's glow,
is now unforgiving; depressingly cold.
The cruel hand of reality,  
has struck me three-fold.

Bringing me back to my life of misery.
Back to my life of pain.
With no one to keep me company.
No one but the rain.

"DAMMIT, WHY COULDN'T YOU JUST LET ME DREAM!!!!"





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Vball Chickie1624
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since 2000-05-14
Posts 116
New York
1 posted 2000-07-24 07:57 AM


That was a very interesting poem.  I liked it a lot....very good.  I hope to read more.  Keep writing and have fun!!

Love ya
Danielle  

"Dream what you want to dream; go where you want to go; be what you want to be, because you have only one life and one chance to do all the things you

Chel
Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511
Baltimore, MD, USA
2 posted 2000-07-24 09:37 AM


Hey there, nice poem, very intersting.  Leaves me with a lot of questions.  Keep up the good work.

Chel

"True friends stab you in the front"
"Always do your best, you will always succeed"

Lani_DarkOne
Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 152
UK
3 posted 2000-07-24 01:47 PM


I know exactly how you feel..waking from dreams hurts alot, i'd rather not dream..
this is excellent, your feelings are portrayed vividly and to the point..

"Controlling my feelings for too long....
And forcing our darkest souls to unfold...
And pushing us into self-destruction...."
*~Muse*~

LyricFetish
Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528
North Carolina
4 posted 2000-07-24 04:03 PM


Wow, your poem is full of passion and yearning. Very true, and very scary. Great job!

*~Meredith~*

It's so obvious
That the promise
Keeps me here
Painting pictures where
All the colors
Disappear
*Lit

Le Capitan de L'Amour
Member
since 2000-07-15
Posts 60

5 posted 2000-07-25 05:58 PM


Hey Berry thats a very nice poem, and  i want u to know that I share that pain with you.see ya later buddy.from chris
Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
6 posted 2000-07-26 05:34 PM


this poem is quite intresting...alot of people feel the same way you do...they just dont express what they are feeling...

~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~

The_Driven
Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 60

7 posted 2000-07-26 08:49 PM


Although i dont actually feel this way in real life(well sometimes), i would still  like to thank you all for your responses. They were a pleasure to read.
Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural
8 posted 2007-12-11 07:34 PM


Enjoyed



ARCTIC WIND

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