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LyricFetish
Senior Member

since 2000-01-13

Posts 528
North Carolina

0 posted 2000-07-12 12:47 PM

Prisoner of dusk and stone
My mind falls with the night
This wind will cut me to the bone
Yet none will hear my plight

Such chilling dark behind my eyes
Afraid to see the truth
A vacant stare, my own disguise
The memories of my youth

An ancient sun who turns her head
And grants the demons leave
I cannot breathe amongst the dead
My soul too cold to grieve

Hark, the world is fading grey
Shadows streak across the sky
Destiny shall have her prey
There is none but she and I

Helplessly I watch my seconds
Slipping through her hour glass
Silence falls, her finger beckons
This my end, my final mass

One foot forward, then the other
Cold consumes and kills my breath
'Dear, God made us for eachother,'
One lasting lie to seal my death

It's so obvious
That the promise
Keeps me here
Painting pictures where
All the colors
Disappear
*Lit

Snickers
Member

since 2000-05-25

Posts 88
East Haddam, CT

1 posted 2000-07-12 02:12 PM

This iz very well-written and I like u'r use of words. Great job. But I have a feeling that there might be a deeper meaning to it. Is there a story behind this one?

~<3 Alwayz~
**Nikki**

~*~*~*~*"We can complain because roses have thorns, or we can rejoice because thorns have roses." *~*~*~*~

LyricFetish
Senior Member

since 2000-01-13

Posts 528
North Carolina

2 posted 2000-07-12 09:30 PM

Well, the only story behind it is that I sat down to write and the words just poured out. I was having a not so great day. Thank you for your concern! Peace.

*~Meredith~*

It's so obvious
That the promise
Keeps me here
Painting pictures where
All the colors
Disappear
*Lit

Jacman
Member

since 2000-06-27

Posts 291
Dwight Il, US

3 posted 2000-07-13 11:16 AM

This is my fav from you yet. the most powerful poetry is the kind that just flows on to the paper without much thought. because sometimes thought will quiet the heart. ya got my vote.

jason

LyricFetish
Senior Member

since 2000-01-13

Posts 528
North Carolina

4 posted 2000-07-14 01:43 AM

Thanks guys! I've decided that I write the best poetry when I'm not concentrating intently on it. If I let my thoughts flow I end up writing exactly what I want to say.

*~Meredith~*

It's so obvious
That the promise
Keeps me here
Painting pictures where
All the colors
Disappear
*Lit

TAP2
Member

since 2000-06-29

Posts 211
Morris, Il USA

5 posted 2000-07-14 01:47 AM

Loved the darkness of this poem. Eery and well written. Hope to see more like it.

Thomas

"I could have missed the pain
But I'd of had to miss The Dance"

-Garth Brooks-

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

6 posted 2007-12-01 11:07 PM

Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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