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Everything You Are |
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Kandi Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354North of Hell |
Everything you are Was everything to me You taught me to move To be moved To touch To be touched Twisting and screaming I pulled away from you Just wanted to be on my own Thinking and dreaming Of what I could do Now that I was all alone Everything you did Was everything I need Letting go, you made me free And opened up your hands You showed me how to need How to be needed How to love How to allow myself to be loved You gave me the strength to cry So I cried for what I saw And the pain that surrounds me I wanted to try But it just got too hard Without you all around me In time I forgot The things that you said They became mixed up Lost inside my head You reached out your hand Ready to take me back Show me all over again I didn’t understand Didn’t want to go back To where I had already been Angry and yelling I ran away from you Not ready to come home There was no telling What I’d have to go through Did you know it’s lonely to be all alone? You taught me to look But now I’ve been blinded Because I lost the hope you gave to me Now I need it the most But now I can’t find it The tears build up until I can’t see But they won’t fall I can’t cry anymore Because nothing gets through this shield of stone I keep standing tall And I’m not sure what for They didn’t tell me it hurts to be alone Now I long to return To the place where my heart is I’m ready to learn Finish what you started I’m begging please Reaching for your hand Down on my knees Waiting for your command Left heaven for earth There’s no choice in choosing Because eventually everything’s tested by fate For whatever it’s worth I know that I’m losing And I’m saying I’m sorry before it’s too late I’ll search for you Until you let me back in And I’m not giving up Until I find the strength to cry again. |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Wow! This is a very powerful poem. I can really feel everything you feel for this person. I hope everything works out! PS-Welcome to Passions! "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Nicely written! I hope eveything works out for you! you have a beautiful way of using words to your advantage!  keep writing! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~   "Love is the product of our discontentment with ourselves." "Bleeding hearts release tears of fire" "work like you don't need money, love like you've never been hurt,and live everyday as if it's your last" |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
Wow, this was beautiful  . It was perfectly written and flowed so easily. I, too, hope everything works and for you. And welcome to Passions  !~Susie "If we could read the secret history of our enemies, we should find in each man's life sorrow and suffering enough to disarm all hostility." ~Henry Wadsworth Longfellow "Driftwood" |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
Hey Kris, welcome to our humble little forum!!!! I think yer gonna like it here. Telling by your first porm I read, we're gonna like having you here. I'd love to pick at it a little bit, but there's nothing really worth picking. Your metaphores were very smart, vocab was good, no too short or simple and the whole flow was very powerful. I think every hopeless romantic reading that sat there and wished that someone would write something like that for them someday. There is more than one girl out there that I let go to freedom whom I wish had something like that to say. Maybe next time I'll get to pick on ya a little bit..j/k!!! Keep it up..later. p.s. thank you for your kind words..keep reading...and writing. Jeremy D. Halstead |
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