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An Unborn Love |
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ConderE Junior Member
since 1999-08-14
Posts 29TX, USA |
I sit alone In a room away from home. I have made a new friend, A sorrowness that never ends, But in the dark I touch a spark. The spark ignites And illuminates the night. Then a single flame shines, And I waste no time, I rush to the light, And scare the flame to fade into night. I sit alone In a room away from home. [This message has been edited by ConderE (edited 07-10-2000).] |
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ConderE Junior Member
since 1999-08-14
Posts 29TX, USA |
This is my first poem that I have written in about a year... and I am not sure if I should still try. Please respond to my poem... it would mean a lot to me. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
conder~~~dont sell yourself short...keep on writing...its not the worst poem i have ever read...in fact i dont even think that mine are any good...but this one is good...keep writing and even if you dont like them maybe we will...someone is bound to like it... ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Well I certainly enjoyed it ConderE! It actually brought back memories for me when I first moved away from home ... sad and scared is how I felt. Keep writing hon! This was very descriptive! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
Please do keep writing. I have allways written basically for myself. But I found out that sometimes other people can benefit from what I have to say. You never know, someone might read one of your pieces and feel relieved that someone out there feels exactly the way that they do. That's what this is all about. I'll be looking for more. jason  |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
Good work. I loved the poem. Keep up the good work. Chel "True friends stab you in the front" "Always do your best, you will always succeed" |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is a good piece, my friend. Don't give up writing, you'll find that it's the friend that's there when all others betray. I hope to see more of your work posted soon!  "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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Phoebee Junior Member
since 2000-07-09
Posts 42Peoria, AZ |
You poem is great. Don't quit when you have so much to give. "Everything happens for a reason!" |
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Wicced_Witch Member
since 2000-02-06
Posts 110Clarksville, TN, USA |
It was a great poem. Please keep writing. I think alot of people, myself included, think that their own writing is bad...We just judge our own things more harshly...Keep up the good work. Stephane |
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BabyGirl1 Member
since 2000-07-02
Posts 91Morris, IL |
This was a wonderful poem. We all know what it is like to either move or start somewhere new. You described that feeling perfectly. Keep posting poems. You are a great writer. Hope to see more soon  "We are each of us angels with only one wing. And we can fly only by embracing each other." -Luciano de Crescenzo- |
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The_Driven Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 60 |
This is a nice poem. Kinda reminds me of what i feel like sometimes. Well anyhow, keep up the good work. |
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TAP2 Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211Morris, Il USA |
You are alwayz going to be your own worst critic. I feel that you have done a great job describing the feeling of being away from home very well. Sometimes we reach for things that we hope will give us solace, a new grilfriend, a new boyfriend, a new anybody, just something, anything. Most of the time I believe that we realize that we are strong enough to stand on our own two feet, when we find that we are enough just as ourselves, and not a possession of someone else. Thomas A. Plemmons "I could have missed the pain But I'd of had to miss The Dance" -Garth Brooks- |
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essenceofangels Junior Member
since 2000-07-12
Posts 36 |
Wonderful poem my dear cant wait to see another! |
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ConderE Junior Member
since 1999-08-14
Posts 29TX, USA |
I would like to thank everyone that has posted a reply. It means a lot to me and I plan to continue writing...but I only write when I am deeply moved so I don't expect to write soon. This poem was written about a special girl that I ruined things with. |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
i LOVE this. i'm glad you got over your writer's block. this is really awesome. there's is much to be said for simplicity, and the simplicity of this one invokes so much. the levels here are good to, and all kept with the candle theme. truly awesome. thanks for postin. We all got our demons. We all got somethin' to atone for. |
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Lovely_Kris Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 176 |
I think this is great and i think it was pretty good. Lovely_kris |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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