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I Am (A Peotry Challenge)
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I Am (A Peotry Challenge) |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723
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In the poetry Challenge forum there is a challenge going around to write with the following template: I am (two special characteristics you have) I wonder (something you are actually curious about) I hear (an imaginary sound) I see (an imaginary sight) I want (an actual desire) I am (the first line of the poem repeated) I pretend (something you actually pretend to do) I feel (a feeling about something imaginary) I touch (an imaginary touch) I worry (something that really bothers you) I cry (something that makes you very sad) I am (the first line of the poem repeated) I understand (something you know is true) I say (something you believe in) I dream (something you actually dream about) I try (something you really make an effort about) I hope (something you actually hope for) I am (the first line of the poem repeated) Here is my attempt at it. It's 3:30 and I'm about to pass out from the lack a lack of sleep so if it is horrible I will be here tomorow to edit it, but this is what I cam up with: I Am I am a dreamer, I am a realist too I wonder if my dreams, will ever come true I hear dreams, silenced by my mind I see my future clearly, also undefined I want to choose one of two I am a dreamer, I am a realist too I pretend that I am destined I feel I should be questioned I touch the edge of my desires, always out of grasp I worry only I, will hear my dying gasp I cry alone, without a clue I am a dreamer, I am a realist too I understand, that I'm duplex I say that life, is too complex I dream my dreams all come true I try to conquer and subdue I hope that I, will come through I am a dreamer, I am a realist too hehe.. told you I'd be here to edit. Just changed acouple words in one line... a very minor change but I couldn't just leave it... lol< !signature--> "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ [This message has been edited by IsGona (edited 01-08-2001).] |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wonderful IsGona! You've not only MET the challenge but exceeded it beautifully! Very well done! Let's hope a few more in Teen give it a try, it's a great challenge!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
I remember hearing about this format. Sounds very restrictive and challenging. I'm there, man. ^_^ As for your poem, very nicely done. I hope that you don't feel like you are in competition with all of us... 'cause we are all going to have interesting versions to share, should we pick up on it. (plus in a competition, it's obvious that I would win. ^_^ just kidding) |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Kit ~ thank you. That was nice of you to say. I hope it catches on to. It was fun Allen ~ lol Of course it's not compitition. But yes if it was, you would put a severe beating on me I'm sure... lol. I look forward to hearing what you come up with. "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Dude! Dude!!!! DUDE!!!!!!!!!!! This was awesome! The poem you came up with was amazing. I loved it dude! DUDE!!!!! Jason, you've outdone yourself on this one. I suggest you save this one in your collection cuz this is not just a challenge, dude this was an amazing poem composed by you. Nice one pal, truly impressive.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Aww... this is pretty. I hate restrictions and have zero patience... but maybe I'll try this. xoxo Jenn "A person can never get over a broken heart if they aren't willing to let go of all of the pieces."-- ?? |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
that was awesome!! I love it! Very well written too!! Keep up the awesome work!! Luv Alwayz, Priscilla How come it is so easy for a person to say "I hate you," but it is so difficult for someone to say "I love you" and really mean it???? |
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Greeneyes617 Member
since 2000-11-22
Posts 329Arkansas |
Hey I'll take your challenge....I did something a lot like this in my class. Wonderful work on the poem. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
J-MAN! I had pretty much the same reaction as Dopey. This is definitely up there with my fave poems of all time. I can relate, too, which is a plus. Welll...keep writin buddy. ~The Cheese inspiration of my art search for light out of the dark all the pictures in my heart lie awake there in my fog... |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Dopey ~ WOW! I think your the one that out did yourself, but thanks. Really meant alot to get a reply like that from you. Jenn ~ I hate restrictive poems to but this one seemed to fall in to place. Thx Priscilla ~ YOU are awsome. Thank you C-GAL ~ Behold the power of cheese!! hehe Wow!! Really, Thank you. I really apreciate it ~ Jason "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
You have done so well on this challenge!! I don't think I would do too good on it, but maybe I'll give it a try. This poem is so cool "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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