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Melster
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Brisbane, Qld, Australia

0 posted 2001-01-07 04:50 PM


To My Dear Lover...

You were here and it was grand,
But things were getting out of hand.
You wanted from me things,
That I'm not yet willing to give you.
Things are not straight up and down,
We have lots to sort out you silly clown.
I deny not that I love you soo much,
To jepordise this just push me more...
We need to talk about what the future holds,
Is it love that you want all covered in gold,
Or are you willing to accept me and all I possess?
I won't offer you the world, money or gold,
But I will give you my heart
Which is more precious than any gold.
Take care of it as I have done,
Never move it, lose it or break it,
For it will shatter into a million peices
And I will never be the same again...


Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly

© Copyright 2001 Melanie Heagney - All Rights Reserved
Dopey Dope
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1 posted 2001-01-07 08:33 PM


Yea i know how that is. Being afraid of being hurt is hell, but you'd never know if he'd hurt you or not unless you entrust him. Good luck.


I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

jeremydraul
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2 posted 2001-01-07 08:48 PM


seems like your a little scared of what might happen if he loves you...
that what I got from it..
the poem was good overall, keep writing
best wishes

~JDR

"Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde

Melster
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Brisbane, Qld, Australia
3 posted 2001-01-08 05:07 AM


Dopey, I can see what you are saying, but I don't know if I want to be more than a friend...  it is difficult, I have lost one friend recently to this sort of thing...  I just don't want it to happen again...

Jeremy...  you are probably right that I am scared of letting him love me...  but as i say, it is difficult...  I just don't know!!

Thanks guys for your advice, I will use it to my advantage...

Melz!!

Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly

Allan Riverwood
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4 posted 2001-01-08 08:25 AM


I have sympathy for your situation, but I am glad that it is motivating you to write so much and so well.  Don't stop writing, and more importantly sharing them with us!
keoni
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Up in the mountains in the NFC
5 posted 2001-01-08 12:19 PM


I agree with Jeremy. It sounds like you're a little afraid of this love. Give things a try, it doesn't have to be love right away. Don't  give up on love, it's out there, trust me I am still looking and have had my fair share of chances to give up.
                                          Jon

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine

Lakewalker
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6 posted 2001-01-09 12:34 PM


Like it says in your poem, you need to talk about things.  I hope everything goes as you want   Oh, and nice job on the poem

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker
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Pixie-Babe03
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since 2000-08-29
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Central Maine
7 posted 2001-01-09 06:23 PM


you sound so much like me.. i have been pushing and potential seriousness away since i got hurt... it is the wiorst feeling.. btu life is full of ups and downs and you have to enjoy the ups while they are there   good luck Melz!
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