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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair 
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This is about time... duh. It's how I try to fight for that last minture or two. Time goes by so fast when the time is great. Enjoy "Time Glass" The aromatic candle, burnin’ it’s wick, Reminds me of time; the consuming critic. Hours snicker at us, as minutes do too, Always limiting us, when something’s due. Just when you envision, night is still young, The ticking hand provokes the bells to a’rung. All we lust for, has been seized by the clock, Let time proceed; let us carry on our walk. The clock and I grappled, ‘til the death, Pieces of time have plummeted to the ground. Permitting us to tread, upon it’s tattered glass, We embrace, and dance to the alluring brass. J.D. Raulinaitis 1/04/01 [This message has been edited by jeremydraul (edited 01-04-2001).] |
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HiddenSparklez Member
since 2000-12-29
Posts 190British Columbia, Canada |
Wow, i never thought of time as being a struggle like you have described, until now! Way to right a poem that makes you think! |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Great timing, jeremy! Lately I have been doing lots of philosophy about time myself... your opinion and mine are opposite-- the more that I analyze time, the less afraid I am of it. Strange, perhaps I could share some of my poetry with you about this sometime? Good poem, it's nice to see such an original topic. |
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TrueLUV Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 158Connecticut, U.S.A. |
A powerful topic to discuss time is what we all race against...WOW GREAT PIECE Hope to read more  |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Great work as usual Jeremy... Melz!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Jeremy: Another great piece. Its just so descriptive..Marvelous. ~AF~ "Poetry is the language in which man explores his own amazement." Christopher Fry |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Why race against time when you can work with it? That's my thought at the moment. I have to say on a side note, when I read "The aromatic candle" I immediately thought of your other poem  Bathroom Aroma is probably not the poem you wanted to have last in my memory, hopefully it will be gone soon "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Jer, this was amazing. Once again I'm left stunned in the wake of your words.... ~Carly inspiration of my art search for light out of the dark all the pictures in my heart lie awake there in my fog... |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
NIce one jer......very nice.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
i wasnt racing against time, i was just expressing how time goes by fast when your having a good time.... allan sure id love to read your stuff ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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