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A Poem (yes, that's the actual title)
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A Poem (yes, that's the actual title) |
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Skyfire 
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding 
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Who am I? Why am I here? Do you love me? Do I love you? Will you help me? What must I do? Why can't I see you? Why can't I hear you? I am a woman. I'm here to fix your mistakes. You don't love me. I love you. You won't help me. I must stay here. You're invisible. You're not saying anything important. |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
wow!it was really powerful. i hope all is ok. REgina |
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branden726
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
this is good but a women is not to fix someone elses problems there here for there own happiness no one else's and this is coming from a guy. i just got lots of respect for women and think there here for the same reason i am....to live life to the fullest great poem i liked it. "i just love when you bring your whole crew because its just a bigger piece of cake for me to chew threw" |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
i agree with branden, and my wishes are with you, great poem ~JDR "A writer doesn't acquire a vacancy of mind, but rather a inadequacy of words." - Jeremy D. Raulinaitis |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Hmmmmm.......in this poem....are you writing in the perspective of being a poem?  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
hmmm... Interesting, what dopey said. "Why can't I hear you?... You're not saying anything important." Those were my fav lines Change the title to "A Good Poem" and this is perfect.  "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Interesting poem, and interesting responses you've gotten from it! Nice job  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
truthfully, i'm a little lost here. I can't seem to put the poem itself and the title together. I'm a little confused, and i'd appreciate if you would explain it to me. thanks  I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
I just couldn't come up with a name for it, so I called it 'A Poem'. Hope I helped ya out! ~*Rhonda "I am Canadian" - Joe If you set limitations upon yourself, it's no wonder you fall short of your dreams - Rhonda J. Adolph |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Different... interesting... great... i love it... Melz!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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