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Tears of Glass Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 182Physically? VA.... Mentally? I'm not quite sure |
I looked in the mirror today, Pefectly groomed, Perfectly dressed, Perfect little smile. I looked at my report card today, Perfect straight A's and B's, First chair viola player, Perfect little governor's school student. I looked at my family today, Perfect parents, Perfect siblings, Big white house, And money to spare. I looked at my disposition today, Perfectly percky, With sugar-coated sweetness, That must make other sick. I looked at myself today, Never satisfied with all I have, Always wanting more, Insecure, searching, Hopeless, broken-hearted, Pretentious, superficial, Obsessed with how I appear to others. Not as perfect As one would think. My perfection is only as stable, As the blurry image in the mirror, Of a not-so-perfect girl, Who can't even decipher, The source of her own, Imperfect tears. *Jennifer |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Wow... You posted two amazing poems tonight. You have tremendous talent. Thanks for posting. IsGona "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
I loved how you contrasted the outer and inner you with the mirror...so creative, so beautiful..amazing job. ~Carly WhY ShOuLd I Be hypnotized by someone else's lies WhY ShOuLd I Take time and pride in what someone else believes... |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Beautiful poem Tears of Glass. I mean truly. This was a very creative way of expressing this topic. It's funny how a lot of people envy other people who they think have so much and yet they don't have much at all. From what I can see though, you have a very precious soul so let that show. Take pride in that and listen to your heart. Then you'll look in the mirror and you'll see the girl that's really there. Once again, excellent poem.  In order to be good one must know evil. ~*Angel of Darkness*~ |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This is a great poem...most people dont even realize how much they have and how lucky there are. There are people out there who would consider the life style that we live as a dream come true while we're all not satisfied...its kinda sad and you never realize how selfish you are and how much you overlook thek that this was a great poem... |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Great poem... I like it... the contrast is soo different... keep in mind that you are whoever you want to be!! Melz!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
i agree, nice post, i enjoyed it! jeremy r "...if you've never met me, then you've no right to judge me. I have a good heart, but this heart can get ugly." ~DMX~ |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
wow....i gotta say that's a really nice piece. i loved the way you presented your thoughts and that outcome. great post indeed....keep em coming Salma |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Very nicely written Tears of Glass ... you've painted a very clear image, one that I knew well myself many years ago. It took me many years to realize I did not "have" to be perfect. It was only when I allowed myself that freedom, that I began to really feel comfortable with "me". Many hugs to you from someone who knew your words well ... Happy holidays and best wishes, /Kit |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Nice job of writing this poem, I think it's good and I hope you have someone who knows the real you. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I guess everyone has already given you the amount of praise that you deserve. I'm lost for words at this moment. Keep it up I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
THis was great. You TRULY have a wonderful talent and I appreciate your words immensely. I hope all is well.......we're never going to be perfect. The trick is learning how to deal and cope with our imperfections....only then can we improve somewhat.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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