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We Never Win |
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peanogrl83 Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 202 |
Yuck. Yuck. Yuck. Vreni We Never Win W hite sanitarium, clean and bright, E radicates happiness with it’s dark light. N ow begins yearning towards yonder Styx, E arly perceptions the tender mind pricks. V engeful scissors of Atropos fetter E ager to etch a consciousness better. R ancored passions deform, leave scars. W indowless prison without any bars. I ncandescent glow shines from within N aught a soul that saves itself from sin. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Wonderful poem as always Vreni!!! (i'll be on AIM in a second...just need to finish up here).....Mua mua! Great poem! I liked it a lot!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
wow~ i love your work. its always so deep..and u have awesome usage of vocab. keep it up ure becoming one of my fav poets! *dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wonderful acrostic Vreni! These are tough to do in free form, but even harder to have them rhyme so beautifully as you've done ... very nicely penned!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
its very kool. the acrostic was very neat.keep it up. Regina happy holidays |
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peanogrl83 Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 202 |
Dopey, DQ, Kit, and Ina - thanks for the replies! Have a splendid holiday! Vreni |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
i have to agree with the rest, this was very nice.... "R ancored passions deform, leave scars. W indowless prison without any bars." loved it...keep posting Salma |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
i don't have to say anything...you already know how I feel I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Excellent work yet again, keep them coming  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Great Job as per normal... you are a great writer and I look forward to more!! Melz!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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