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Stan Part 1 |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden 
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He couldn't see the tears in her eyes, or hear her vioce from the basement, Where he withered his disguise, a mask plastered in cement. He couldn't taste her fear, he could care less, she knew what would happen next, she knew him best. And everyday, when the mail came, a sad emotion it would bring, because no one ever wrote back, deepening everything. Her song she sang, when she was scared, lonely, angry, to keep her there. My tea's gone cold, just like hers did, i wonder why too, why i got out of bed that morning, and why i can't see at all. but even if I could, i couldn't, because it would be gray, except for one thing, that reminds me that it's not so bad, that picture on the wall. --------------------------------------------------- Just my stupid understanding of the song Stan. tell me what you think! I can't see at all. Even if I could it would all be great, to put your picture on my wall, it reminds me that it's not so bad, it's not so bad. |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
I don't know the song, but I liked the poem!  |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
thanks elizabeth!!! i appriciate you reading my poems. ~*bump because im psyched because i got a lead in the school musical*~ I can't see at all. Even if I could it would all be great, to put your picture on my wall, it reminds me that it's not so bad, it's not so bad. |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
thanks elizabeth!!! i appriciate you reading my poems. ~*bump because im psyched because i got a lead in the school musical*~ I can't see at all. Even if I could it would all be great, to put your picture on my wall, it reminds me that it's not so bad, it's not so bad. |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
the song "stan", in your words is perfect. good job. btw congrats for the musical Regina |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Hey congrats on the lead! What musical is your school putting on?  [This message has been edited by Elizabeth (edited 12-20-2000).] |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I think your poem fits the song very well, you did an excellent job with it. Congratulations on getting the lead!! And Merry Christmas to you too "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
Congratulations and good poem! Melz!! Dont believe what ur eyes r telling u they only show limitation. Look with ur understanding, find out what u already know & u will see the way to fly |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was great.......good luck and hope things are well.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Thanks ya all! The play is called the Mikado and my character's name is Yum Yum. I can't wait!!! Anyways, thanks a lot. Merry Christmas. Ya know I love ya all!!!! Allysa I can't see at all. Even if I could it would all be great, to put your picture on my wall, it reminds me that it's not so bad, it's not so bad. |
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