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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
Memories I used to live on memories, Can't do that today. I used to think I can't survive, On life and its everydays. I used to that that freedom had the power to cure, But now I look at Palestine and can't believe hearts are pure. I used to know reality as an ugly subexsistance, Look at where it's taken me, in reality's own predicaments. I used to be optimistic even when it came to being true. Can't you see truth has led me to an ugly tangled youth. I used to love each moment when I could me alone, Suclusion has now led me to the point of being torn. I used to find my comfort in the ink of this pen, Now this pen has dripped of pain that you yourself have sent. I used to think God gave everyone the chance to find their wealth, But now you see that ones damned from the moment they walked the Earth. I can't believe I used to think, the world a pleasent race. Look at what you've done to me and tell me how pleasent you've made my place! [This message has been edited by Ron (06-25-2011 10:05 AM).] |
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apsara Member
since 2000-11-09
Posts 70 |
Salma, I'm sorry, so sorry. I heard about everything over there. My prayers are with you. Excellent poem. apsara |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
Salm! great post, im so glad to hear from you again in such a sweet way... your such a kind person and keep 'em coming, ill email ya soon, i promise! jeremy r "...if you've never met me, then you've no right to judge me. I have a good heart, but this heart can get ugly." ~DMX~ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Excellent job on this poem! It's good to see you posting again  I think the poem is really good because it has such a serious tone. The way you started every other line with "I" made the poem seem so personal. I love the way you've written this and I hate that what's happening over there is happening."Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
The poem, was serious but honest.part of my family lives in Isreal and everyday i hope this will all and and just maybewe can all get along. Isacc Rabin was on the way to peace. Its horrible and painful" "ani rotzah shalom!" 'i want peace' amazing feelings in your poem Regina |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was great. Hope all is well!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Some parts of this i can relate to..to me this poem expresses a lot of confusion and looking back on your old life style...i really liked it a lot..great job hun |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
Thanks for all the replies you guys!! We just found out a friend died a few days ago in Palestine....the family is devestated. I can't believe this violence hasn't yet ended. apsara~ Thank you so much, my prayers are with everyone there too....I hate the violence and the death... jeremydraul~ Thanks for the sweet word Talk to you soon...Lakewalker~ Heey!! Glad to be back ofcourse!! I love vacations... Ina~ I guess we can both relate then, eh?? We both feel the same way, email me sometime, maybe we can talk Dopey~ Thanks for your reply... xShUgArHiGhx~ Thanks a bunch for repling...you guys do an awesome job of making me write more! Salma |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
hey Salooma --- don't lose hope. The seriousness of your poem has just made me feel bad, but that's ok. Nothing compared to what others have to face. I guess reality does hurt. Keep your head up. I'll have you in my prayers  I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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