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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA 
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**Would You Regret?** < !signature-->If I should die tomorrow, would you regret walking away? If I was no longer a phone call away, would you suddenly have more to say? If you saw me happy with another guy, would you regret everything hurtful you've ever said? If you realized I'm never coming back, would you then have tears to shed? If you could see my unfixable broken heart, would you regret playing me like a game? If you only knew of the tears behind my smile, would you then see you're to blame? If I were to act strong and move on, would you regret thinking I was weak? If you realize what you have done, would my forgiveness be what you seek? If I wrote a thousand poems like this, would you cry even just one tear? If I told you I still loved you, would you forget the past and hold me near? "A true friend can see the truth and pain in your eyes, even when you're fooling everyone else" [This message has been edited by DancinQueen (edited 12-05-2000).] |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
OMG sweets!!!! Don't even tell me about idiot  Now what's going on? Is idiot being blind again? Hope we talk about this You know peach, this poem is so beautiful. I really mean it. It's one of those poems that just melts someone's heart. I really love it and envy you for being able to write something so beautiful. "If I wrote a thousand poems like this, would you cry even just one tear? If I told you I still loved you, would you forget the past and hold me near?" BRAVO sweet peaches I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
DancinQueen:A word of advice, pine for the guys that deserve to be pined after. This person sounds like an absolute meanie to treat you like this. No guy is worth crying over if he makes you feel this way. ~AF~< !signature--> "Poetry is the language in which man explores his own amazement." Christopher Fry [This message has been edited by anonymousfemale (edited 12-05-2000).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
OK first off great poem! Second off i see that everybody is judging this guy you got here. We do not know the situation, nor do we know him. Acire seems to know you pretty well and his little nickname for him is "idiot". I think it's wrong for us to judge this guy from your poetry due to the fact that a lot of the poems we write doing with pain and suffering are written at the moments of greatest pain. Anyway who knows, this guy may be a jerk one day and a sweetie the next. See, i think i'm a great boyfriend, but my gf does get pissy and mad at me sometimes. I am sure she tells all her net friends all this and all that. When she's happy she just talks to them about whatever, but when shes mad she talks about it to get it off her chest. So all everybody hears about me is the bad stuff. People she knows on the net thikn im the biggest *&#)(*@# and she deserves more. C'mon! Now i'm not saying that THIS GUY has my same situation, but i do have to give him the benefit of a doubt. I do not like to be judgmental. Anyway once again great poem!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
acire~~>HEY HEY LOL just a poem...keep that in mind  Anonymousfemale~~hey! Thanks for replying..althought this really isnt something im going thro, just a poem, thanks so much!! DopeyDope~WOW! First time you've ever replied with more then 10 words to one of my poems. LOL I know what you mean about your gf's friends only hearing the bad stuff cause she only talks about it when its buggin her...but im sorry that has to happen, and im sure its the same with you and your friends, im assuming. but thanks for replying! bye babe **DQ "A true friend can see the truth and pain in your eyes, even when you're fooling everyone else" |
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SorrowsMystress Member
since 2000-04-01
Posts 178I'm a wanderer, a nomad...I don't live in one particular area, Just wherever I end up. |
I don't reply to much poetry in this forum, but I just had to comment on this piece. First off, I have to say that Teen poetry is usually my favorite, because the emotion is expressed sometimes 100 times more. Plus, it's great to see talent at such a young age (I'm not saying that I'm much older...I'm only 21, still quite young myself). Now to get to the business at hand. Dancin Queen. This is absolutely beautiful!! I can remember only a few months back feeling the same exact way that your words have expressed. And, to be quite honest, I STILL feel this way. *Sigh* Men!!! (just kidding guys... not all men are jerks, just the ones I happen to date. lol). I do have to say, though, that you clearly have a lot of talent within you, and a very good way of expressing your emotions. Again, I absolutely LOVED this work, and I hope to read much much more from you. "It was my love that did us both to death. " -Sylvia Plath |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
SorrowsMystress~hey! I feel so honored that you chose my poem to reply to  And thanks so much for all the positive comments. and im with you on the thing about men lol so true so true, not all are jerks..just the ones we date Well thanks again!~!*DQ*!~ "A true friend can see the truth and pain in your eyes, even when you're fooling everyone else" |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I also think you did a very good job here! I really like the end of it that acire already mentioned. Nice job. (I guess my reply is not too original and won't be as long as Dopey's, but I do think the poem's great )"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Omg you have no clue how much i love this poem!! I've asked myself these questions over and over again in my life....Why does everyones lives have to be so full of "what if's?"...how annoying is that?? But instead of just thinking about it i wish those questions could be answered. GrEaT poem!!! |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
Lakewalker~hey there Thanks for the kind comments, im glad you read it..i was waiting on you! shuagerhigh~ hey chick! do you realize how much we have in common? LOL this is kinda scary..like every poem that we each write...both of us can relate to it. maybe we were seperated at birth Kidding!! LOL but yeah 4real im gonna mail you sometime so we can talk!~~<3 always~Kiley "A true friend can see the truth and pain in your eyes, even when you're fooling everyone else" |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
DQ, you write a touching poem here and I kinda agree with sweetie Dopey in his expressed reply... I'll look forward to reading more of your poems... coco |
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~*~PrettyGirly~*~ Member
since 2000-11-04
Posts 83Fitchburg Ma Usa |
Hyia haven't chatted with you in a while. But good poem, I'm getting a new wheelchair I'll keep you up to that. About the poem that guy shouldn't do that to you! Your Friend ~Min~  A romance last forever you want it, A friendship last a life time |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
CocoBai~Hey!! Thanks for replying, and yeah i think i agree with what Dopey said Min~~hey grlie! Thanks for replying, good luck with your new guy I hope everything works out! thanks for replying<3~~Kiley "A true friend can see the truth and pain in your eyes, even when you're fooling everyone else" |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is a very well-written poem. You ask some difficult questions, questions I have asked many times before. I can really relate to what you seem to be going through. Feel free to contact me if you want to chat. Toodles! "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
i love this poem and this is my favorite of sweets, so........ ~*bump*~  I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
BEAUTIFUL!!! My dear DQ, this is amazing. And I hope that this has nothing to do with your personal life. You let it all out and so perfectly too. I love it. Its going to my library. Sorry it took me so long to reply Ive been really busy lately. People leave our lives as quickly as they come, but the ones that mean something leave footprints in our hearts. |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
ERIN~hey chic! Long time no talk. I understand the busy thing. Glad you got to reply..and yeah just a poem i'll IM you sometime cause i havent talked to you in awhile k? Bye babe*¤DQ ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Minister of Dissonance Junior Member
since 2000-12-10
Posts 20 |
no pity for the heartless self-absorbed *rage* the great dissonant one |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
umm not sure how to take that last comment.. ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Crystalina123 Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 228 |
DQ -- Ok, I haven't been on this site in forever, so many new faces!! Anyway, I think this is an awesome poem. I can honestly understand where you're coming from. Awesome!!! Dopey -- I understand what you mean about your girlfriend telling her friends the bad stuff but I also tell my friends all of the good stuff about my boyfriend. Sure I vent when I have a problem, but my friends also get tired of hearing how great my boyfriend is. Keep that in mind, she just might be telling others about the good stuff too!! Crystal "I'll be your crying shoulder, I'll be the greatest fan of your life." "You don't love her because she's beautiful. She's beautiful because you love |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
Crystaline~ hey thanks for replying! i hope i get to read some of your work soon!¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
I have one simple thing to say... Men have wandering eyes and hearts - they never know what they want or when they want it... till it is gone!! I think cheaters should be punishable by death! But we women can't say much cause we do it too!! We are only human!! Not that that is an excuse or anything - but it's true!! Good work Dancin Queen!! Melz!! |
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Minister of Dissonance Junior Member
since 2000-12-10
Posts 20 |
true love suffers not to be weighed down with guilt *refresh* the great dissonant one |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
Thanks Melster!! I'm glad you liked it...and thanks for the advice! ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Melster Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 442Brisbane, Qld, Australia |
No problem!! Work like you don't need the money, Love like you've never been hurt and Dance like nobody's watching!! Love Melz!! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I love this poem and i think more people should read it. I see a lot of people are missing it, they're loss this poem actually insipred me to write like a continuation to it...same format i mean so check it out too, please I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
thanks acire ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Acies
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
as long as my "too blind to see" poem or this poem is in the front page, the other one should be too...so, ~*bump*~ I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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