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Wong Again Mr. Spider
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Wong Again Mr. Spider |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico 
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Wrong Again Mr. Spider: Laying here weaving a mesh of webs. Living the spider's life. Consuming up time. Killing all I see for food, And weak enough to be Brushed away by a human hand. Falling to the ground With a sense of amazement. Lower and lower. Faster and faster, And suddenly when I hit The bottom soil, I smile. Nothing can get worse! I'm safe to go on with more webs! I take one octa-step, And suddenly a shadow from Above crushes my body. I was wrong, it did get worse. Bloody shoe!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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BaByGuRL Junior Member
since 2000-11-25
Posts 13 |
haha...dopey, that is quite creative...it gave me a good laugh...keep writing you are very talented |
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Kandi Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354North of Hell |
Hey there I dunno if this had some kind of deep hidden meaning to you, so I hope it doesnt offend you when i say that I just totally cracked up laughin when I finished this one. I'll go back and read it again to look for a meaning though. But I loved it, and I needed a laugh so I thank you  By the way, I'm still mad that you welcomed my sister to passions before I did...darn you (just joking) Lots 'o' Lovin' Kris ~*Things you see the way you see them will never be seen again*~ ~Won't you come and hold my hand? This world has taken me as far as it can... w |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
o yeah!this was great. im not suprised though. By the way. have you got a new fetish w/ bugs?jk. welll it was great. i loved "bloody shoe" today you have made my day w/ all the new poems ive read from u....hope to see more..soon Regina aka Ina |
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branden726
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
Hey dopey? New subject i see? this is the first one that ive really seen that hasnt had something to do with love or love lost or death ya know its GREAT!! i like it. "i just love when you bring your whole crew because its just a bigger piece of cake for me to chew threw" |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I took this poem in two ways. First, the literal way, a spider being killed, which I found funny in my own twisted little way The second was a deeper look with symbolism and all of that great stuff. Thinking life's fine than suddenly a tragedy when you least expect it. I'm not quite sure the way you meant for us to take this one, but either way, this is great!"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Lake, I am in love with you! I am so glad you took the time to read this a bit deeper than the rest. I wasn't annoyed at the fact that people thought it was amusing because i guess it kinda was hehe. But anyway you got it completely right. The spider usually for me symbolizes darkness and the opposite of happiness. Although it's the contradiction of light and good......it wants to be happy. I mean who'd wanna be sad? hehe.. The web symbolizes life and the hard work we all do to achieve our goals and bla....but it's flimsy....weak....and it was brushed away by a human hand. Then he falls and falls and thinks he's gonna die but doesn't....and WOAH! He's happy! He's thinkin nothing can go wrong...the worst has hit....he's at rock bottom......so he gets up...brushes the dust off and the only way he can go is UP UP UP! But wait.....nope nope....the shoe crushes him and he dies......it did get worse. thanks for reading deeper! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Great symbolism, my friend. I always look forward to your pieces and their little hidden meanings. I especally like how this one is structured. Thanks for posting! "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Dopey Dope is da man. This was awsome. When I read your title I knew that I was going to laugh reading it. Which I did but as I read it I could see me in the spiders shoes. (DOH spiders don't have shoes). Anyways it was great. I would have never caught though the whole web being our life and all that we worked for though. I'm glad you exlplained that IsGona "Every body has their destiny... I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN ~Hatebreed~ |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
UhhHHHhhhHHh the feverish delirium is taking over........I didn't get the meaning at first (blame it on the flu) but once I read it again and again I think I really got it. Great job, and sowwy I didn't see this sooner!! Ciao! ~Carly Home is where the heart goes when it needs a band-aid. |
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