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sorrowfulangel Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 59Memphis,TN |
When you look at me, what do you see? Do my eyes reveal the truth, or are they as good as hiding as me. Sometimes I wish, you could see the real me. But I can't reveal myself, I've traveled that path before, and all I remember is the pain. I want to confide in you, all the things I lock inside. You make my feel vunerable, and it's all I can do to run from you. Sometimes I wish, that I could accept the protection your arms offer. And as I sit crying alone at night, I try and think of all the things that could have made it right. |
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DJLI Member
since 2000-06-21
Posts 237TN, USA |
when i look at you, i see drugs...  beautiful, as always... -if you don't like the message, don't kill the messenger.- [This message has been edited by DJLI (edited 06-30-2000).] |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
welcome to passions...i hope you enjoy it here as much as i do...this is a nice first post... ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Nothing in life is for certain. There are no guarantees in life just risks. One of these days, you're gonna have to open up again cause if you don't the right person might come and just pass you by. This is basically being unfair to yourself. |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Welcome to Passions! I'm sorry that things didn't work out with this person, but things always have a way of working themselves out. Good luck in the future! "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
yes never give up thats the worst thing that you could ever do. and welcome great first piece really enjoyed it and keep it up. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
i know more than anyone the feeling of wearing a mask. hiding the real you because the fake one is so much better. sometimes, being the you that everyone seems to take a liking to, is even...fun. it's like you know something that they don't. let me tell you somethin though. you're not hiding from them. they're hidden from you. if you can't see yourself, how can you see anything at all? it sounds like you're learning this lesson the hard way, like i did. i just hope you don't have retaught to you as many times as it was to me. very well penned thoughts. Welcome to Passions. this was a helluva entrance. hope you enjoy your stay.< !signature--> We all got our demons. We all got somethin' to atone for. [This message has been edited by Ethan_Halo (edited 07-01-2000).] |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
I love when new people come in here. I've only been in here a month today and it seems like the participation has gotten so great. You have the skills...keep usin' um. Jeremy D. Halstead "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
This is nicely done angel! I love the way you show us your pain and I truly do hope that just because you were hurt before you don't let that deter you from future relationships! Keep up the writing because I hope to see a lot more from you!! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~ p.s. welcome to passions! ~*~Love is the product of our dicontentment with ourselves~*~ ~*~SMILE! It makes your butt shine!~*~ |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
Hey great first piece. I hope to read more. Keep up the good work. Chel "True friends stab you in the front" |
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TAP2 Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211Morris, Il USA |
Love this piece. Cryptic and pointed at the same time. Blooming then fading again. We all have a part of us we do not wish for anyone to see. We all have a part of us that it seems a certain someone can't and will never see. Don't give up and don't stop writng. Poetry like yours is a gift to us all. TAP2 |
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Misty Member
since 1999-08-01
Posts 121USA |
All I have to say is, "WOW!" I love this poem it is so powerful for your first post. I am amazed, far better then me! NICE and welcome to passions! ©Misty For more Poems bye Misty GO TO: http://www.geocities.com/Paris/Arc/1644 "You died a failure because you never tried!" |
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sorrowfulangel Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 59Memphis,TN |
I just wanted to say thank you to everyone that replied to my poems.I've never been one to share my poetry,because I was scared of critism,and though I had no talent.It's amazing what all this does to improve one's self esteem. "god is the biggest under-achiever I know,something good happens god is great,something bad happens,he now works in mysterious ways" |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Welcome to Passions SorrowfulAngel! What a wonderful first post ... you've expressed your emotions well in this poem, hope to see more from you! Well done! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Snickers Member
since 2000-05-25
Posts 88East Haddam, CT |
Welcome to Passions!! Beautiful work, and impressive!! I really like the way u write, and I'll be looking forward to more from u. But like the others said, don't give up on love, u'll only be cheating yourself. ~<3 Alwayz~ **Nikki** ~*~*~*~*"We can complain because roses have thorns, or we can rejoice because thorns have roses." *~*~*~*~ |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
This is very well-written. I admire your style and your talent. Welcome home! *~Meredith~* I am none but the angel Who sings you to sleep As you pray to God Your soul to keep *Me |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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