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peanogrl83
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0 posted 2000-11-13 09:52 AM


BLUCH.  

My Face

Forget my face, ignore it now,
Of futile hope yourself disavow.
The Fates pulled their thin threads,
Dragged me from the secrets I dread.
I thank the greater powers that be,
Granting me clarity with which to see.
You are a fake, not what you seem,
Imagination’s fancy, but a dream.
I lay my head down now to rest,
My ears deaf to truths confessed.
I smile as I swallow all your tears,
Laugh as I weave among your fears.
All the while, you stand there, alone,
Claim my cruelty you cannot condone.
Blood on my fingers, I point to the past,
Twas you who caused my agony last.
In your clouded mind you’re the martyr,
Murdered by mine hand, Atrocity’s daughter.
My demonic tendencies you’ll soon learn,
Towards days of simple pain you will yearn.
Screaming now, I reflect your fall from grace,
For forever seared in memory remains my face.


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Dopey Dope
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1 posted 2000-11-13 02:23 PM


Great poem!!!!!!!!
its not bluch!
hehe......great job!



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Lakewalker
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2 posted 2000-11-13 03:39 PM


Wow, as always this flowed well and is just all around awesome

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niceguy
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since 2000-11-13
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3 posted 2000-11-13 03:47 PM


This is not BLUCH! This is a good poem. It flows well and was easy to read and understand. Hope I can get to write like this. Keep on writing!
niceguy

curlygurly
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4 posted 2000-11-13 04:27 PM


Great poem. it was awesome, i don't know why you don't like it. i think that everyone hates their work, no matter how great others think it is.  
Curly


"So many tears i've cried, so much pain inside"
-Lenny Kravitz


Lani_DarkOne
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since 2000-05-28
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5 posted 2000-11-14 04:15 PM


WOW!!
The whole flow, and what you're expressing is BRILLIANT..!
Very intriguing...I love it..

"Controlling my feelings for too long....
And forcing our darkest souls to unfold...
And pushing us into self-destruction...."
*~Muse*~

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6 posted 2000-11-14 04:36 PM


"Screaming now, I reflect your fall from grace,
For forever seared in memory remains my face."

Wow! This is some powerful writing! It flows beautifully, and I love the feelings that you portray. I wish you wouldn't be so hard on yourself!

False gems may shine as brightly as the genuine article, but there are always those who can tell the difference.



Isabel Galaxia
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7 posted 2000-11-14 05:12 PM


Hey, that was great, as usual.  You have a lot of talent, and write on such a high level.  I wish I was that good  .  Keep it up
Bel

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8 posted 2000-11-28 10:59 AM


DAMN girl!!!! where you come up with this.  BRAVO!!! BRILLIANT!!!  I'm totally speechless

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


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