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peanogrl83 Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 202 |
BLUCH. My Face Forget my face, ignore it now, Of futile hope yourself disavow. The Fates pulled their thin threads, Dragged me from the secrets I dread. I thank the greater powers that be, Granting me clarity with which to see. You are a fake, not what you seem, Imagination’s fancy, but a dream. I lay my head down now to rest, My ears deaf to truths confessed. I smile as I swallow all your tears, Laugh as I weave among your fears. All the while, you stand there, alone, Claim my cruelty you cannot condone. Blood on my fingers, I point to the past, Twas you who caused my agony last. In your clouded mind you’re the martyr, Murdered by mine hand, Atrocity’s daughter. My demonic tendencies you’ll soon learn, Towards days of simple pain you will yearn. Screaming now, I reflect your fall from grace, For forever seared in memory remains my face. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Great poem!!!!!!!! its not bluch! hehe......great job!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Wow, as always this flowed well and is just all around awesome  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! http://www.thehungersite.com |
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niceguy Member
since 2000-11-13
Posts 113Sapello, NM, USA |
This is not BLUCH! This is a good poem. It flows well and was easy to read and understand. Hope I can get to write like this. Keep on writing! niceguy |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
Great poem. it was awesome, i don't know why you don't like it. i think that everyone hates their work, no matter how great others think it is. Curly "So many tears i've cried, so much pain inside" -Lenny Kravitz |
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Lani_DarkOne Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 152UK |
WOW!! The whole flow, and what you're expressing is BRILLIANT..! Very intriguing...I love it..  "Controlling my feelings for too long.... And forcing our darkest souls to unfold... And pushing us into self-destruction...." *~Muse*~ |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
"Screaming now, I reflect your fall from grace, For forever seared in memory remains my face." Wow! This is some powerful writing! It flows beautifully, and I love the feelings that you portray. I wish you wouldn't be so hard on yourself! False gems may shine as brightly as the genuine article, but there are always those who can tell the difference. |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Hey, that was great, as usual. You have a lot of talent, and write on such a high level. I wish I was that good  . Keep it upBel |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
DAMN girl!!!! where you come up with this. BRAVO!!! BRILLIANT!!! I'm totally speechless I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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