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Crashing into Love
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Crashing into Love |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA 
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I keep on hitting repeat On the song that means so much to me Thinking of you each and every time During the verses of each line What I wouldn't do just to hear your voice tonight Having your words wrap around my soul real tight As I find myself crashing into love tonight You told me that a simple friendship is for our best benefit And my simple gratitude goes out to you Just for that simple reply Though as my heart listened intently, my soul began to cry Please don't ask me why I mourned days before, for I found the unspoken answer knocking upon my bedroom door I was quite content with the unknown outcome But tonight I feel as if I'm terribly alone It really doesn't come as a shock Nor as a surprise Maybe I do look upon you with different eyes But I only look upon you with the words you made yourself out to be So I'm sorry if I took it all wrong Or made you think otherwise You and I are far from perfect I know that much But no matter how hard I try My heart is still crashing into love tonight And falling into the violent waves And I doubt if I can ever be saved... |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Crashing into love tonight..now there's a perfect phrase. The wording in this was incredibly powerful and I especially loved the end. Great work, and good luck in everything... ~Carly A word is dead When it is said Some say, I say it just Begins to live That day. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
This sounds tough! The poem seemed very strong to me, the emotion sounded sincere, it flowed well, and I just love how it's written. I hope you don't drown in the waves *throws a life jacket*. Great work! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Lake said it all........but for me....it'd be drowning in the tears *puts on his life jacket*  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
Great poem! it was really deep and ummm emotional i guess you could say. great work  Curly "So many tears i've cried, so much pain inside" -Lenny Kravitz |
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silvrduck Member
since 2000-11-05
Posts 146 |
My goodness.. I LOVE THIS POEM! It's beautifully written and so sincere... (My best friend is going through the same thing, and in a way, so am i.) Gosh this is a good poem... wow. Good Job Hope everything turns out alright! Take care... ~Sarah |
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silvrduck Member
since 2000-11-05
Posts 146 |
My goodness.. I LOVE THIS POEM! It's beautifully written and so sincere... (My best friend is going through the same thing, and in a way, so am i.) Gosh this is a good poem... wow. Good Job Hope everything turns out alright! Take care... ~Sarah |
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ZAOfreak Junior Member
since 2000-11-08
Posts 22CA, USA |
From the bottom of my throbbing heart, I feel for you... that's all I can say. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
simply perfect.....OMG I'm totally out of words. You took my breath away.....I don't know what to say You've become one of my favorite writers in passions...i sincerely love your poems I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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