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Lonely Boat |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico 
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Lonely Boat: The no name world. The silent dream. My body is shackled. A dead light beam. I run away To bear the sea. A lonely boat. My eternity.  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
Great poem dopey! i especially like the second stanza where you make it look as if you have an eternal life of loneliness!  Curly "So many tears i've cried, so much pain inside" -Lenny Kravitz |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
hey, wow, I really like this one Dopey, it's really good. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
hey, we all are going thru probably the same things, so we're all in the same boat. Never feel that you're alone, always remember, you have passions to lean to... I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
Way cool, M.G. I dig it. Peace! *~Meredith~* I'll just keep on laughing, Hiding the tears in my eyes... *Oleander |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I actually kinda dig this one too.....but only this much --> <-- Anyway thanks for replying! Much appreciated. "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey man. I wuved it!! Whoo!! It went... WHAM. Yeah. I can't explain it, but it went WHAM. Get it? I don't.. See ya.~Carly< !signature--> Little Miss Muffet Crouched on a tuffet Collecting her shell-shocked wits. There dropped (from a glider) An H-bomb beside her Which frightened Miss Muffet to bits. [This message has been edited by Child of the Stars (edited 11-07-2000).] |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
I loved it Javier!!! *jumps up and down and claps excitedly* woo hoo!!! ~*Justine*~ |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Very little words to find exactly what you wanted to say...And a very good job too!!!Keep it up!!! ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Dopey, wow!!!!!! I agree with Erin. So few words to describe what you have to say. I love you! Morning rain fell on my window, and I can't see at all. Even if I could it would all be gray, put your picture on my wall, it reminds me that it's not |
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