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The Bumps |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico 
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NOTE: ok this is one of my free-style-dont-give-a-hoot poems. Just me messing around with some ryhme. The Bumps: The three fates. It's too late. Live straight. Find mate. See through. So blue. It's true. The fake you. Very long. Great song. We prolong. Blow a bong. Extremely tough. Life is rough. Dont cuff. This is enough.  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Very interesting Dopey...But i like the rhyming =o) |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
tres cool.... "Very long. Great song. We prolong. Blow a bong. Extremely tough. Life is rough. Dont cuff. This is enough" wow! Good job Javier Ina |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
This was awesome. great job on the rhyming there.... yeah anyway great poem!  Curly "So many tears i've cried, so much pain inside" -Lenny Kravitz |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Wow that's truely different. I like it...nice rhyming job Bel |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I liked the poem and also how you described it, as a "free-style-dont-give-a-hoot poems". Anyway, good job "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I didn't think this poem was worth the time of any of you to read. Thanks for actually wasting it for this piece of crap haha. Have fun! "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
"The three fates. It's too late." I need help on this line Dopey. I need to know what you mean by this. Much appreciated Sorry if I'm asking for too much. i've just learned to read your poems deeper than what is seen and read. I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
The 3 fates symbolize....past, present, and future.... and then I say that "it's too late"... and then I say to live straight. so what i am saying is that we can't care about the 3 fates because all we're doing is wasting our time. We have to move on a straight line and found our mate......mate symbolizing our connection with our goal and so on. We can't relish within the past, present, or future. Well you asked about the first stanza, not the rest....so that's all i'll explain. Rock on acire. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
this is good, not bad for a short freestyle I like it, a different style |
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