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tearsinheaven Junior Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 18 |
Words wizz around my brain like flies But no one can hear my silent cries I scream and shout with no reply To voice my pain I dare not try If you could sit inside my brain You could see all my hidden pain My hate for myself grows deep inside Sometimes I wish I would have died The screams inside get louder and louder Crushing my heart and soul to powder I wish you were here to kill my cries Go in my head, REALEASE THE FLIES! |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
great piece and great expression of the flies. i love the idea but i must ask is this truely you? if so find a way out or you'll end up like me and thats a fate far worse than death. Cause each day i fall into this hell more and more. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
well i think that this is the first poem that i have read by you...but im not sure...anyways i really liked it...is this the truth about yourself???or did you make it up???i hope that it is made up...do you know how your friends would feel if anything bad happened to you??? ~IF YOU WANT SOMETHING VERY BADLY~SET IT FREE~IF IT COMES BACK TO YOU~ITS YOURS FOREVER~IF IT DOESNT IT WAS NEVER YOURS TO BEGIN WITH~ |
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Rockhead01 Junior Member
since 2000-06-26
Posts 12Maryland, USA |
first of all, thatnks for reading this, i didn't think anyone would. well, this was me about a month and a half ago. but i'm ok now. thanks. tell ya what, i got more where that came from. =) |
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Lani_DarkOne Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 152UK |
Brilliant poem...I'm glad you're ok now, but when you do feel like that...write, it's the best way when you can't 'voice your pain' Keep writing! "Controlling my feelings for too long.... And forcing our darkest souls to unfold... And pushing us into self-destruction...." *~Muse*~ |
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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
I feel your pain man. Sometimes my head feel as though it will explode, or that if I don't die soon I will go completely insane. If you got more where this one came from, bring it on!! jason |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
Wow...that's one the the best analogies I've ever read...comparing the relentless thoughts in your head to flies...interesting. I've writen a poem similar to that, so I know where yer comin from..just keep that chin up...there's always a better state of mind. Jeremy D. Halstead "Time is the matter, and in a matter of that all wounds will heal and all scars shall fade." |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
You've definately received my vote! This is the perfect poem in the fact that you are conveying your pain through something besides just pain. (if that made any sense at all) Keep up the wonderful writing!! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~ ~*~Love is the product of our dicontentment with ourselves~*~ ~*~SMILE! It makes your butt shine!~*~ |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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