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Cold and Alone |
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hoppy Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 271 |
This is one of my few poems that i have written to be founded to any kind of reality. I actually wrote it while sitting at a picnic table beside a river. See what you think....... I sit alone in a familar place It's not too cold, though i brought you just in case The river sits there cold and still I'm not sure why i'm sitting here but i soon will I pull out a picture, the one i have of you I stare at it intently wondering again of the past What might have been comes to mind again These thoughts again dawn my mind like before I freeze on the surface but the inside i'm not sure Your face so delicate and soft Still I grasp the piture alone, now in the dark It's now so cold in the dark, where are you? I need you and your no where to be found I put my head in my hands, the cold goes so deep I'm lost in thought, even to lost to weep I stare at the dark image that was in my hands I wonder of past and present yet still uknown Why do i sit here so cold and alone? Swift as a shadow, short as any dream; Brief as the lightning in the collied night, That in a spleen unfolds both heaven and earth, And ere a ma |
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Stephanya Member
since 2000-11-03
Posts 63Berkshire County~USA~ |
I like your poem. It makes me think of my X. If you are writing abotu yourself...It's good to sit and think of your past and all of your good memories, but don't let it get you down. You have your life ahead of you. I'm almost 19, and I've been in here for almost a year now (I have a different name now though). As you can see the 2 poems I just posted are about 2 totally different people. One is about my X who totally crushed me by betrayal, mistrust, ETC. Although NOW I found someone new. Yes it took meabout 10 months to finally move on, but I'm doing great now. I found someone a million times better than him. Keep your head up high, and keep writing. Look forward to reading more.  (:***stephani***:) "A true friend will always stay a friend whether or not you feel as though the friendship or relationship is about to end." |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked what you said at the beginning of the poem saying that you wrote it at the side of a river at a picnic table. It gives me this serene mood. Anyway the poem itself was pretty sad......i hope you get all warm and stuff. Even i get cold, and i live in Puerto Rico.......and island paradise where the lowest it'll ever get is 70. Anyway.....keep posting bye!!  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I like the poem a lot I think that it's very good even though it's kind of a downer. Good job and I hope if this is happening right now that you feel better soon."Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Very well written. Expressions well conveyed. just do me a favor, keep your head up, ok? keep sharing  I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey. The picture painted by these words was incredible. I loved it. Have a sunshine day!! ~Carly 747 fell out of Heaven Crashed through the roof of a 7-11 You're working on a slurpee Things get hazy Reach for a twinkie now you're pushing u |
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