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Stand Still |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico 
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NOTE: this is one of those styles i like writing in.......i also like the last line and uhhh...yea. Stand Still: Those human ridden faces That everyone did see. The snowy-white graces Shedding eternity. Rose shade afar Wisking the nights away. The cold shooting star Standing still, and yet astray.  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey man. Yup, that last line rocked. I also liked 'human ridden faces'. Great words, great poem... ~Carly The grindstone of life will either polish us or wear us down, depending on what we're made of. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I really like the first line and the whole thing is good  Hmmmm, what else to say, what else to say? I dunno, so, uh, good job "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Dopey~ I dont know how you do it, but you write some amazing poetry...Keep it up buddy!!! You sure do have alot of talent!!! ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
Hey!! Awesome poem!! I really liked it! Yup that last line was pretty cool!! Well keep up the great work!! Luv, Priscilla ~*~ YeStErDaY iS tHe PaSt, 2mOrRoW iS ThE fUtUrE, ToDaY iS a GiFt, ThAt'S wHy We CaLl iT ThE pReSeNt. ~*~ |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
OH....one of your best ones so far my friend. BRAVO!!! I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well thanks all for the replies, much appreciated. I'll keep on posting my 6th round. "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
hey dopey great poem. that last line was really good. Curlz "So many tears i've cried, so much pain inside" -Lenny Kravitz |
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