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Love Hurt Onlooker
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Love Hurt Onlooker |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico 
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Love Hurt Onlooker: Laughing corners of unfolded dreams. Walking a run of unasked means. Wind that sways the trees gallore. The nature of God and the despised heart sore. Time slipping through my wrinkled fingers. Desire of future, yet past still lingers. Engulfing myself in a torn up love shirt. An onlooker of life with hateful love hurt.  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I think I get it! Wow, that's amazing for me  Well done here Dopey!"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey. You're really gonna go somewhere with your talent, maybe to the moon and back. Send me a postcard?? Anyways, I really loved this.. ~Carly The grindstone of life will either polish us or wear us down, depending on what we're made of. |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
hey you! Awesome poem..captivating. and im sorry we didnt get to talk much the other day, but we will next time i promise! <3 always*Kiley "One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be" ~Carol King |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Hey guys thanks for the replies. yea in the 6th round there are a lot of short little poems with 2 stanzas. I started to like the short but complex style. I don't think this poem is as hard to comprehend as my others, i think this was pretty out there. Thanks for replying though.... "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Dopey Dope
Moderator
Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Oh and by the way, happy halloween! < !signature-->"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! [This message has been edited by Dopey_Dope (edited 10-30-2000).] |
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