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Why Can't You See? To: TD
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Why Can't You See? To: TD |
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BraTt Junior Member
since 1999-10-25
Posts 41Yakima, WA United States |
I don't want to see you hurt, Even thought I can't stop how you feel. But please remember in the end, My love was the one that was real. She's hurt many guys before, Playing her stupid little games. She's using you like her private toy, Keeping her image in a perfect little frame. Why can't you see what she's doing? She's going to break your heart. I wish there were something I could do, So you could realize it was stupid for us to part. I love you so dearly, And this is why I thought I'd let you know. That when she leaves you broken hearted, The love I have for you is still here to show. *~You are the star for which all evenings wait~* |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey. I really liked this, it got the idea across really well. I'm not gonna give ya any advice but to keep yourself strong. ~Carly The grindstone of life will either polish us or wear us down, depending on what we're made of. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Wow this was immensely sweet. I don't know what to say, it was great though. Really great!  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Sometimes they just dont know what's right, do they?! This poem is well done, I like your thoughts and you got them out very well  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
I really liked this poem. this has actually happened to me, me being the blind one. well love is blind and it hurts but you move on only to do it again to get a moment of pleasure from it. very good poem Curlz "i've kissed the moon a million times, danced with the angels in the sky" enrique iglesias |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I thought this was a great poem, its really hard watching someone you love, love someone whose totally not right for them but is too blidn to see it. Great job =o) |
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BraTt Junior Member
since 1999-10-25
Posts 41Yakima, WA United States |
Thank you for all your great replies, I didn't think I would get any. Everything is a big mess between me and my ex, but I'm not going to give up on him, because 2 years of my life have been surrounded around him...and he means a lot to me, more than anything in this world, there is no way that you can give up on something that means that much. Thanks for all your responses. *~You are the star for which all evenings wait~* |
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BraTt Junior Member
since 1999-10-25
Posts 41Yakima, WA United States |
Please give me some responses to this poem. *~You are the star for which all evenings wait~* |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Hey...this was great, but I really don't know what to tell you. Wow...I really don't know. Um...anyway it's a great poem, your emotions are very well expressed, keep it up, good luck Bel |
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SweetAngel New Member
since 2000-10-29
Posts 2 |
Wow, this was a great poem. I totally understand where you are coming from. But, I'm sure that in time, he will realize what he lost, and wish he hadn't wasted his time with some b*tch that wasn't even worth it. I'm so sorry, and I hope things turn out better. Just keep your faith, and it will turn out okay. |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I really like this one. For some reason, it jumps out at me and it feels like I'm part of the poem. Actually, it has happened to me once, and it's with the last relationship i had. I hope he sees the truth. Good luck to both of you I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Don't you hate when people choose the obviously wrong choice, and you can't help. This poem is really good. Keep flowing Keoni |
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