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Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

0 posted 2000-10-26 04:48 PM

NOTE: Me no likes de stylez

Musing Over Me:

Why do I write?
To find the me.
Why do I write?
To truly be.

How do I think?
By closing my eyes.
How do I think?
By ignoring the lies.

Where is my light?
Trapped in a nook.
Where is my light?
The love that was took.

When can I blink?
Only when it's true.
When can I blink?
Only when I'm you.

"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

Ina
Senior Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

1 posted 2000-10-26 05:54 PM

well it's intersting.......Its different Javier.....i dont know what else to say
Ina

Isabel Galaxia
Senior Member

since 2000-06-18

Posts 733

2 posted 2000-10-26 08:00 PM

Yup, it's different. The style isn't bad acutally.

I'm not sure how you meant it...it can be interpreted in MANY ways...therefore I'm not sure what exactly to comment on it. Anyway it's good

Hasta luego
Bel

sweetstuff101
Member

since 2000-07-27

Posts 375
OK, USA

3 posted 2000-10-26 08:14 PM

that was excellent! I liked it lots. keep up the great work.

:How do I think?
By closing my eyes.
How do I think?
By ignoring the lies.

:

those are my favorite lines. Great job!!!

Luv,
Sweetstuff< !signature-->

~*~ YeStErDaY iS tHe PaSt, 2mOrRoW iS ThE fUtUrE, ToDaY iS a GiFt, ThAt'S wHy We CaLl iT ThE pReSeNt. ~*~

[This message has been edited by sweetstuff101 (edited 10-26-2000).]

Lakewalker
Member Elite

since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

4 posted 2000-10-27 05:27 PM

I don't think this style is bad. The poem is very self reflective. Wow, i've had a LOT of sugar today. I'm reaching the part after the rush where you're going down. Anyway, nice poem

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

Child of the Stars

Senior Member

since 2000-09-07

Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI

5 posted 2000-10-27 06:47 PM

Hey there! I can't believe I missed this...My eyes must be messed up. Anyways, I really liked the style. The ending was da coolest...well buhbyes...

~Carly

The grindstone of life will either polish us or wear us down, depending on what we're made of.

curlygurly
Member

since 2000-09-12

Posts 276
USA

6 posted 2000-10-27 07:34 PM

I really liked this poem. it was VERY different but it was good. great poem

Curlz

"I feel fine enough I guess
considering everything's a mess"
Barenaked Ladies

Morouxshi San
Member

since 2000-10-11

Posts 207
San Juan, Puerto Rico

7 posted 2000-10-28 12:15 PM

diversity makes for new worlds.
good poem.

San, the wise
San, the dumb
San, the guy...

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

8 posted 2000-10-29 07:39 PM

"How do I think?
By closing my eyes.
How do I think?
By ignoring the lies."

What more can I say, but this is one of your best ones....

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR

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