Teen Poetry #3 |
Musing Over Me |
Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
NOTE: Me no likes de stylez Musing Over Me: Why do I write? To find the me. Why do I write? To truly be. How do I think? By closing my eyes. How do I think? By ignoring the lies. Where is my light? Trapped in a nook. Where is my light? The love that was took. When can I blink? Only when it's true. When can I blink? Only when I'm you. "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
well it's intersting.......Its different Javier.....i dont know what else to say Ina |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Yup, it's different. The style isn't bad acutally. I'm not sure how you meant it...it can be interpreted in MANY ways...therefore I'm not sure what exactly to comment on it. Anyway it's good Hasta luego Bel |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
that was excellent! I liked it lots. keep up the great work. :How do I think? By closing my eyes. How do I think? By ignoring the lies. : those are my favorite lines. Great job!!! Luv, Sweetstuff< !signature--> ~*~ YeStErDaY iS tHe PaSt, 2mOrRoW iS ThE fUtUrE, ToDaY iS a GiFt, ThAt'S wHy We CaLl iT ThE pReSeNt. ~*~ [This message has been edited by sweetstuff101 (edited 10-26-2000).] |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I don't think this style is bad. The poem is very self reflective. Wow, i've had a LOT of sugar today. I'm reaching the part after the rush where you're going down. Anyway, nice poem "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey there! I can't believe I missed this...My eyes must be messed up. Anyways, I really liked the style. The ending was da coolest...well buhbyes... ~Carly The grindstone of life will either polish us or wear us down, depending on what we're made of. |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
I really liked this poem. it was VERY different but it was good. great poem Curlz "I feel fine enough I guess considering everything's a mess" Barenaked Ladies |
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Morouxshi San Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 207San Juan, Puerto Rico |
diversity makes for new worlds. good poem. San, the wise San, the dumb San, the guy... |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
"How do I think? By closing my eyes. How do I think? By ignoring the lies." What more can I say, but this is one of your best ones.... I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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