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branden726
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0 posted 2000-10-23 03:56 PM


We made such a cute couple,
It seemed like we were meant to be,
Everyone told us we were so sweet together,
Then all of a sudden it has to end?
No, it doesnt have to end like this plz,
Just stop for a moment and realize,
Your walking out on the man of your dreams,
I gave u everything,
But the one thing i gave u that i wont let u leave with is my heart,
If you walk out that door your not taking my heart with you,
You were my angel the one who i thought would never hurt me,
If you would plz think about it,
It doesnt have to end this way!



"what doesnt kill you only makes you stronger"

© Copyright 2000 Branden Jacobs - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2000-10-23 04:25 PM


Well I like how you wrote this peom and all I can say is look at the quote you have in your post!

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

branden726
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2 posted 2000-10-23 04:36 PM


Hey lakewalker i thank you so much i mean you always always find time to reply to poems and i find that very kool of you and i just wanted to let u know i am still with my g/f this is just how my day kinda felt if ya know what i mean me and my g/f are great tho thanks and i get what u said about my signature

"what doesnt kill you only makes you stronger"

Jenn Cirrincione
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3 posted 2000-10-23 05:45 PM


I understand whatcha mean by "that's just how my day felt" It may not be over for you two, but for a split second, those were the vibes you were feeling. Good work though....
Jenn


"Guess I'm not smart, I let you un-nerve me, I let you control me; afraid the truth would hurt me, when it's you that hurts me more." TLC

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4 posted 2000-10-23 06:01 PM


"You were my angel the one who i thought would never hurt me,
If you would plz think about it,
It doesnt have to end this way!"

my favorite lines. I hope all works out well for you, best of luck.
Great job, Keep writing!!

Much Luv,
  Priscilla


~*~ YeStErDaY iS tHe PaSt, 2mOrRoW iS ThE fUtUrE, ToDaY iS a GiFt, ThAt'S wHy We CaLl iT ThE pReSeNt. ~*~



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5 posted 2000-10-23 06:25 PM


this was a good poem at one point in time I felt like this and could not express my feelings. I have posted a new poem called The search has ended(To Tamma.O)read it please and tell me what you think please.
Thanks

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6 posted 2000-10-23 06:35 PM


Hey well glad to hear you and your gf are still together, i was getting kinda scared. Cuz it was like i read this love poem 1st about you and yer gf and things kicked ass and now all of a sudden a break up poem?!?! I was like....NOOOOOOO!!!!!!! but it's all good.....hope you have a better day tomarrow.
adios!



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TopGunLauren
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7 posted 2000-10-23 07:09 PM


Your poem is true for a lot of teenages going through that same situation these days.Keep up the awsome work.
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8 posted 2000-10-23 07:14 PM


I'm really glad to hear that your not in the specific situation that you wrote about in your poem. Thats sooo tough to go through, its comeplete hell. Im really happy that things are great between you and your gf. I hope they stay that way. Great break-up poem, i loved it!
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9 posted 2000-10-24 03:12 PM


Hey thanks for replying to my peom and yes me and my g/f are still together it will be 1 month tomorrow and i am so happy it seems like its been forever and thats good!!!!


"what doesnt kill you only makes you stronger"

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