Teen Poetry #3 |
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Perfection's Price |
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Moon_Hunter New Member
since 2000-09-04
Posts 7 |
Hi everybody, sorry I haven't wrote in a while but I've been busy with school and all. This poem I wrote is about the need that people have to attain perfection. I find that people try to achieve the impossible goals for nothing. If you're wondering, I don't know anybody who is like this, but I hear about it everyday. Girls who are annorexic and stuff like that. It is completely crazy. Perfections Price You stare blindly at the pictures Of a perfect person Their cosmetically enhanced bodies Seem to mock you Each day you attempt To attain this dream of perfection Thinking that your dress size Determines your self worth Yet the days go by And still every imperfection Seems to mock you As you stare into the mirror As each flaw disappears You invent new flaws That seem impossible to get rid of Yet you are willing to pay the ultimate price Each day You slowly wither away Growing sick and weak No longer recognizing yourself Then one day you reached perfection As you lay on a stretcher Dying of starvation Yet you were happy since you had achieved Your goal of perfection |
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Child of the Stars![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey. WoW, this was really well written and way too true...the last stanza was really powerful... The people walking in darkness have seen a great light; on those living in the land of the shadow of death a light has dawned. ~Isaiah 9:1-2 |
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Child of the Stars![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey. WoW, this was really well written and way too true...the last stanza was really powerful...happy writing.. ~Carly poop sorry about that double post!!!!!! < !signature--> The people walking in darkness have seen a great light; on those living in the land of the shadow of death a light has dawned. ~Isaiah 9:1-2 [This message has been edited by Child of the Stars (edited 10-21-2000).] |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
This is a good poem you've written about this sad subject. Great writing! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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xShUgArHiGhx![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Wow...this poem was extremely powerful. I can relate to that need of perfection. My need didnt take me over so much to as resulting in lying on a stretcher but it got pretty bad. Great poem...hope to see more of that! It was great =o) Each day You slowly wither away Growing sick and weak No longer recognizing yourself |
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Dopey Dope![]()
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I say.......to hell with perfetion! Great thoughts and a nicely written poem. ![]() "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
people just don't like living with insecurities..easy enough to understand...great poem man I can only see through your eyes This is how i die |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Hey that was great! Um....hesitant to admit that this kind of describes me, I'm the perfectionist. ![]() Bel [This message has been edited by Isabel Galaxia (edited 10-22-2000).] |
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LoveBug![]()
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is some really powerful writing. Although no human can achieve perfection, the closest ones achived with what they have within themselves, not outward appearances. If we all could just forget about appearances... well, the world would be a step closer to perfection. False gems may shine as brightly as the genuine article, but there are always those who can tell the difference. |
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