The light at the end of the tunnel

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Teen Poetry #3

The light at the end of the tunnel

Master
Senior Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

0 posted 2000-10-21 12:54 PM

All of us know where we’re destined
And right after we pay for the toll,
We’ll be traveling down the intestine
Of the giant that swallows us whole.

Brawny monster exposes his veins,
On the subway map of New York.
Searching tentacles wait for the trains,
Where the 5 and the 6 make a fork.

The electrical worm swerves its body,
To the beat of the sleepless city,
To the echoing steps of somebody
Who got lost in the maze of graffiti.

Here, the shrills of the breaks, never sudden,
Are awaited with calm expectation
And the light at the end of the tunnel,--
Is a 6 train approaching the station.

Check out my poetry here:

http://cafepoetry.com/stage1/andrey_kneller.htm#My%20Hamlet

Kit McCallum

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Member Laureate

since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

1 posted 2000-10-21 07:36 AM

Excellent description Master! You've painted some great visuals here ... well done!

Best wishes,
/Kit

peanogrl83
Member

since 1999-12-04

Posts 202

2 posted 2000-10-21 09:51 AM

I haven't seen you for a LONG time here, Master! Excellent work, as always....the images brought to mind from this!! Splendid, as always. :.)

Vreni

Child of the Stars

Senior Member

since 2000-09-07

Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI

3 posted 2000-10-21 10:22 AM

Hey. All I can say is wow. heh, this was great. happy writing...

~Carly

The people walking in darkness
have seen a great light;
on those living in the land of the shadow of death
a light has dawned.
~Isaiah 9:1-2

Lakewalker
Member Elite

since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

4 posted 2000-10-21 05:21 PM

I also think this has some great visuals, I like how it's written. Good job on the poem

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2000-10-21 09:26 PM

I like the topic. If it had some sort of deep meaning then it flew right by my head. Oh well, but the train idea and the whole concept intrigued me.

"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

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Master
Senior Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

6 posted 2000-10-22 01:20 AM

Thanks everyone, it's been a while since I've last been here.

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