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u tell me one after u read(please read) |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada 
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sorry everyone this poem isnt very good bu t i need to say something and i was having a hard time writing it so bear with me...i would appreciate comments though When I noticed you staring at me I felt sick to my stomach, I knew your reputation so I was afraid The drugs had started to kick in the room spining the hardcore jungle beat drumming in my ears started to fade, lights were dim, my eyes blurry,blocking out any escape from you My legs started to fold underneath me, I felt I fire crawling upon my body my temperature was rising out of panic Two muscular hands grabbed at my side and swung me over his shoulder the thuds on the wooden stairs echoed in my ears I figure whats going to happen and I try to fight and nothing works I can't do anything im being carried away by the drugs, the boy feeling his hands roam my back I feel a bile rise to my throat As i hit a soft cushion its a bed o god please help me! I can't stay awake anymore, darkness envelopes my world i try to fight away the the blacknees but i fall out of conciense I wake the next morning every ache reminds me of what i try to deny what i need to deny... ~Ina~ |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
I feel that it is a very good poem, but let me say I'm sorry. The way it is written I'm guessing it's true. This is a very sick thing to do. People who have that mentality, do not deserve to function as a normal human being. I do not feel that the poem needs changing, just us as humans Keoni |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Sometimes people suck. I can not imagine how horrible this must be. The poem's raw emotion is what I think makes it good. Thank you for sharing this! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
This is a very serious topic Ina ... I'm not sure whether you are stating drugs were taken purposely or if someone slipped something unknowingly into a drink, but either way, it does not condone the resulting behaviour by this person. The person appears to have taken advantage of you and the surrounding situation. If this is a personal experience Ina ... I would urge you to discuss this with an adult, someone whom you can trust; a parent, a friend, a counsellor at school. I'm concerned about you Ina. If you need to talk, please feel free to contact me directly at my e-mail: kit@netpoets.com Take care, /Kit |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Ina~ I dont know what to say...I am taking this as it is true...I have never been in that postition and hope never to be...The way you wrote it and all...I mean whoever did this to you was so wrong...It shouldnt have happened if you were on drugs or not...I honently wish I could read peoples minds just to see what they are thinking before they do something stupid...Take Kits advice she said it so perfect... You expressed yourself very well...Thanks for sharing this with us...< !signature--> ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ [This message has been edited by ERIN (edited 10-20-2000).] |
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