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Jose Marti
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0 posted 2000-10-14 11:36 AM


I struck out again,
how much longer does this go on?
this streak that seems to never finish.
it has been months
since I've even been on base.
what is this?
will I never cross home plate again?
Is that what this means?

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Lakewalker
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1 posted 2000-10-14 01:37 PM


Interesting toughts, well done on this one

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

Morouxshi San
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2 posted 2000-10-14 01:54 PM


nice comparison.
you a baseball fan?


San, the wise
San, the dumb
San, the guy...

Dopey Dope
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3 posted 2000-10-14 08:09 PM


*smirks* i like baseball!



"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

Erin
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4 posted 2000-10-14 08:57 PM


The title is perfect for this Jose...Good one too!!!I always get frustrated at the littlest things...And give up but keep trying...So just keep trying it will happen!!!

~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~

Jose Marti
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5 posted 2000-10-14 09:48 PM


thanks lakewalker, I have enough bad luck to write volumes about it

san: yes I am a baseball fan. I'm still mad that my country took 2nd place in the olympics, that never happens,
the poem is not really about baseball however

dopey: I'm in a batting slump

Erin: I hope so!

jeremydraul
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6 posted 2000-10-14 10:31 PM


i like the molding of baseball and feelings to relate to your problems, just remain a contender and hit a homerun!  

jeremy r


"...if you've never met me, then you've no right to judge me. I Got a good heart, but this heart can get ugly." ~DMX~

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