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An old scar |
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Caz Member
since 2000-09-13
Posts 133Concepción, Chile |
This poem is about the same girl of "The memory remains". She played with me again, and now she must be laughing with her boyfriend, while I'm in tears in my lonely darkness. An old scar Why did you do this? You played with my strings, I just wanted one last kiss, And that’s the only thing I miss. Why do you want to remember, When we used to be together, When my life was better, And our friendship would last forever. How did you want me to feel, When my life was at your will, When the pain in my heart was real, And I just needed to be healed. You want to be with me again, But the only thing I see is pain, I don’t want to turn insane, I don’t want to cry in vain. It's been raining since you left me. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Great job...I advise you to take a look at my signature...Chin up and keep expressing yourself... ~Carly Better days are on the way, my friend, just a ways on down the line. I believe that just around the bend, everythings gonna be fine... |
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Fearless_Angel Member
since 2000-10-03
Posts 57Calgary, AB Canada |
Hey Caz: Great poem! Very meaningful and descriptive! I hope things start to shape up for you soon...and if you eva wanna talk, drop me a line at [email protected] or give me an "uh-oh" at 64399384 on ICQ, okies...keep writing! Lotsa Love, Angel (^_^) |
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Caz Member
since 2000-09-13
Posts 133Concepción, Chile |
Thanks for the replies, it really means a lot to me. Thanks Angel, I'll message you, thanks for caring. Bye, and thanks again. It's been raining since you left me. |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
I hate people like that! They toy with you, just when you know it's over and you can move on they come back to you... Can't they just let you be? Good writing! Jenn "He's mastered the art, of looking sincere, his eyes have a way, of making you stay, don't look in the mirror"- Chely Wright |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
This is written so well, great work. I can't help with any advice, so I'll just say ditto to the others. Keep writing  |
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Virgin Suïcide Member
since 2000-08-11
Posts 319Netherlands |
ey!! really nice poem Caz!!! remember: luv ya lots!!! keep it up!! luvz, Renée All of my life Where have you been I wonder if I'll Ever see you again ~*~*~Lenny Kravitz-Again~*~*~ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Great poem and im very happy to have read it. keep it up!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
Great poem! i think that you expressed your pain very well! Curls "i've kissed the moon a million times, danced with the angels in the sky" enrique iglesias |
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Caz Member
since 2000-09-13
Posts 133Concepción, Chile |
Hey, thanks for the replies, well it kind of sucks feeling like a toy, like a puppet. Last poem about this girl was after a big problem we had, we had a fight and our friendship end up in the trash. I wrote this poem 'cause I was going out with this girl, I thought it was time to forget and forgive, but she didn't appear, I waited and waited and waited and I'm so........!!!!!!! So, that's the story behind the poems. I hope everything is clear now, thanks for replying. Bye. Caz It's been raining since you left me. |
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