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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico 
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The Oh's: Oh hell! Oh life! What's the point? Point as in start. Point as in end, In between, up, Down, and all around. We are what we hate. Beware potatos, sharp objects, And linen pants. Praise hypocrites and their Dirty dog ways. Oh hell..... Oh well....  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
Well..this was just a little on the different side  But i love your creativity, keep up the great work**~!*DQ*!~ "One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be" ~Carol King |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Very diferent indeed. Honestly, I ended up reading the poem over and over, but I can't seem to grasp it all the way. Dopey, I'd love for you explain to me what the poem is really about. Thanks...waiting for your reply I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
This is cool, it's a great style. I may not understand all of it (I'll never claim to understand all of anyones poetry ) but I like it a lot. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
(first stanza) -Ok the first 2 lines are basically saying who or what the poem is dedicated too. To hell, to life. So then the 3rd line asks a question. Whats the point of hell and life? Ok so there's the main question in the poem. Then I continue throughout the stanza to elaborate on what I mean by "point". Point as in the start, end, in between, up, down and all around. That's the POINT that I mean. Everything about POINT is what I want to know about life and hell. What the hell is the point?!?! (second stanza) - Ok so the first line simply states something that pisses me off. Whats the point in life if we are what we hate? This is written pretty negatively, but that's the perspective I was in. Then I say what to be afriad of....... potatoes = nature.... sharp objects= death....... linen pants= clothing apparel= conformity to wear clothes= conformity in general. Then I go on to say that we need to praise hypocrites and their ways. Their Dirty Dog ways, animal related ways. As if to say hypocrites are just a category of "being" in themselves...not even human...but to praise their ways and to subdue to it. (written sarcastically)........ and then i just say as in this giving up tone of writing...Oh hell....like..like im saying DAMNIT...and then the next line is...."oh well"...as if to symbolize just me giving up caring about this whole problem and moving on. OK SO THERE YOU GO! BYE! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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kutzly Junior Member
since 2000-10-08
Posts 17ohio |
great again awasome stylish again love them peace me "when there was only 2 sets of footprints it was when i carried u my son" Footprints |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Great writing, keep it up! Jenn "He's mastered the art, of looking sincere, his eyes have a way, of making you stay, don't look in the mirror"- Chely Wright |
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