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Vball Chickie1624 Member
since 2000-05-14
Posts 116New York |
The tear was born in my eye, When I found out that you did lie. The tear began to fall, No wonder you never did return my call. The tear rolled down my cheek, The thought of losing you made me weak. The tear fell to my lip, And in my heart I felt a big rip. More tears began to fall down my face, At an even more rapid pace. I've never felt like that before, Did I just like you or was it more? The song from you explained it all, So why did the tears continue to fall? Did you make your decision too fast? If we were together would it last? I knew I would never hurt you, That's something I couldn't do. The last tear was born in my eye, It fell to my lip where it then did die. Hey guys...I don't think I posted this before...if I did, sorry. This was actually about my love triangle last summer...horrible thing to be in, but it all worked out okay...I realized he wasn't worth it anyway! Well have fun! Luv ya, Danielle "Dream what you want to dream; go where you want to go; be what you want to be, because you have only one life and one chance to do all the things you want to do." "The role of a writer is not to say what we can all say, but what we are unable to say." - Anais Nin "Follow your own heart, not others." |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Danielle: This is an inetersting poem. Love traingles are the worst to be stuck in aren't they?  I'm glad though that you find out what this guy was all about. ~AF~ "Poetry is the language in which man explores his own amazement." Christopher Fry |
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BGirl_Princess New Member
since 2000-06-25
Posts 7Burlington, Ontario, Canada |
Wow! That was such a good one! I can somewhat relate to it! I love how you used "The tear was born in my eye" it just gives it it's own personality, you know? Rather than something dull, like "I had a tear in my eye" or something! Know what I mean?! Hopefully! Well keep up the great work!! -Tina a.k.a. BGirl_Princess |
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CLBinLOVE Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 147Hilton Head, SC, USA |
hey, u did post this b4, although i think it was on teen forum #2, and its such a good poem that i dont think anyone will mind, hehe and since i already said something about this poem (forgot what, actually im jus tired) i dont wanna say anything about the poem good poem though (i can remeber that much, hehe) CLB always follow your heart, never follow others unless it is truely where you want to go, and never give up a dream, maybe just set it aside for a while... :) |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
great work here also and i'm beginning to fallin love with your work and the depth of it. so keep it up so i hav esomething to read. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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