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peanogrl83 Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 202 |
Hey everybody!!! I'm just back from a little coupla month trip, so I'm going to start trying to reply to everyone's poems! (just in case you were wondering why I haven't been around.. .lol) Here's another horrid piece from me.... Vreni The Looking Glass I had a dream, once, of what could be A looking glass of hope, when I was free. With a piercing shatter, the mirror did break A fallacy, a lie, Misjudgment’s mistake. I see your face as the slivers shimmer Pensive eyes, but a smile glimmers You fall to your knees, cut your hands As you falter repairing your broken plans The shattered pieces won’t yield to your will Remain apart, in fragments, separate still. Examining the remnants, you gasp with fear You finally see through the broken mirror. Motivations, black orb, a haunting vision Inconspicuous, unmasked, is it’s precision. Calculating machine, as cold as the glass, Doubt filled chasms on a faceted mass. It reaches through its reflection as you scream Engulfing your innocence, your fairly tale schemes. Drawing you in, preying hungrily on trust, Consumes your ideals, turns your convictions to dust. All this I observe from my perch in our bed, As I look in your eyes, and see my reflection instead. |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Am I the first?? Well definitly a good piece here. I'm kinda depressed cause I believed I had a large vocabulary... and yet, sometimes I'm not understanding all that you say! Oh well, that's just me!! Keep writing, I look forward to more. Jenn "He's mastered the art, of looking sincere, his eyes have a way, of making you stay, don't look in the mirror"- Chely Wright |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
 Welcome Back I like the peom a lot and will be waiting for more  |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
hi, yes well welcome back even though we haven't met. I'm Javier. This poem was great. I liked it a lot.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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peanogrl83 Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 202 |
Jenn - I've been reading your work, your grasp of vocab. seems to be just fine, so don't you worry! lol Lakewalker - Thanks for the wb and comments! Dopey/Javier - Splendid to meet you, thanks for replying!! Vreni |
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Singer1981 Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 148Fredonia, NY USA |
Vren, So i stop in...thinking about posting this poem I just wrote...and there's your name. I didn't realize you were still posting here...now I have to catch up on all your work! Anyways...fantastic job as always! Email me sometime. I miss you terribly! Sars |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
That was absolutely vibrant and special in its own way. The word selection and various rhymes collaborated perfectly in my eyes. Keep it up and hope to hear many more poems from you. Welcome back! Love, Jeremy "I will know where I'm headed, 'cause I'm so tired of the suffering, I stand before you, a weakened version of your reflection." ~DMX~ "Prayer III" |
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peanogrl83 Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 202 |
Sars- Yep, I'm still here. Working through some not so fun emotional distress at the moment (which I shall talk to you soon about!) But thanks for the compliments! You're too sweet, as always! :.P Anyhoo, I miss ya too, I'll tty soon! Catch ya later! Jeremy - Vreni |
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