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Pixie-Babe03
Member

since 2000-08-29

Posts 387
Central Maine

0 posted 2000-09-30 10:47 PM

This is your very last chance,
and I promise you.
If you give it up
it was dumb of you to do.

This is your very last chance
take my hand, please come with me.
Another promise I can make
is how happy we will be.

This is your very last chance,
but are your feelings strong?
Or is it her you want?
You haven't known her long.

This is your very last chance
and if you walk away...
This is the last promise I will make...
For this i'll see you'll pay.

JaYnEe
New Member

since 2000-07-24

Posts 2
Queensland, Australia

1 posted 2000-09-30 11:27 PM

Hi, im only new to this website, so im not sure what to do and everything.
I think your poem is really excellent, and you have a good talent. I hope to be reading more of your poems.

from JaYnEe

If YoU wErE a TeAr In My EyE, i WoUlD nOt CrY fOr FeAr Of LoSiNg YoU

StarPryncess17
Senior Member

since 2000-05-31

Posts 932
Colorado

2 posted 2000-09-30 11:36 PM

What a wonderfully worded post! I'm sorry that you are in this situation...I hope he makes the smart choice!
Love Always
~*~Jessica~*~

~*~sMiLe! It MaKeS yOuR bUtT ShInE~*~

sweetstuff101
Member

since 2000-07-27

Posts 375
OK, USA

3 posted 2000-10-01 12:24 PM

great poem, it really meant something to me. Keep writing!

Luv,
~*~sweetstuff~*~

~*~y0u CaN tRy 2 ErAsE s0mEoNe Fr0m YoUr LiFe, BuT iF tHeY rEaLLy MeAnT s0mEtHiNg 2 y0u, YoU WiLl NeVeR 4gEt ThEm.~*~

AngelShell
Member

since 2000-03-01

Posts 446
not heaven nor hell so...

4 posted 2000-10-01 12:58 PM

wow...I suppose this is the same situation as "Can you give it up"

I really like your writing...it is so expressive and you use a lot of raw emotion that is so great to read.

I really hope that I'm going to be able to read more soon.

Shell.

**I didn't loose my mind it was mine to give away**
~Robbie Williams~

Dopey Dope

Moderator

Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2000-10-01 12:44 PM

This poem was great i liked it a lot. Keep it up and i hope he picks YOU!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Lakewalker
Member Elite

since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

6 posted 2000-10-01 01:46 PM

I love how you put this into words, it's a really good poem!

Erin
Member Elite

since 2000-06-15

Posts 2527
~Chicago~

7 posted 2000-10-01 01:50 PM

Girl this was really good...I like the last couple lines the best...

This is your very last chance
and if you walk away...
This is the last promise I will make...
For this i'll see you'll pay.

I dont know what to say...But I really like it...Good work!!!

It TaKeS a MiNuTe To LiKe SoMeOnE, aN hOuR tO hAvE a CrUsH oN sOmEoNe & A dAy To FaLl In LoVe, BuT iT tAkEs A lIfEtImE tO fOrGeT sOmEoNe.

Isabel Galaxia
Senior Member

since 2000-06-18

Posts 733

8 posted 2000-10-01 04:17 PM

Hey, this poem is really good. As for the situation, it clearly sucks, and I'm sorry it's that way for you

. I hope he makes the right choice...but if he doesn't...then he wasn't good for you. So keep ur head up, good luck, and keep smiling....

Bel

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

9 posted 2000-10-01 05:04 PM

This is such a good poem! I unfortunately can totally relate to this and if this is true for you then im sorry that you have to be going through this. I know its difficult. But overall this is an excellent poem!

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