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amazon_lover Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 491Dublin,Ireland |
A rare mix of beauty and innonence A gentle nature filled with effervesence A smile equivalent to million watts radiance A body sculpted by god to perfection Eversince we held each other there is always a longing To touch you,feel you,love you,admire your beauty The thrill of an incomplete feeling when I part with you An anticipation to hold you and yet make you feel free It began just with a kiss and everything was just a fairytale after We move apart and come closer again but you are always a dream to come true for me You're an angel who came out of the world for me I miss you very much and I hope you miss me too You're the sweetest person ever to have been born I spend my day filled with these moments of forlorn An image of you flashes in my dreams very often Sometimes I do see another,I wonder whether its me Sincerely A_L |
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ChibiDeathscythe Member
since 2000-06-09
Posts 128 |
Great poem! I especially loved the end.... it kind of caught me off guard somehow and I had to read it again... lol  "Suicides have already betrayed the body. Still born, they don't always die, bu dazzled, they can't forget a drug so sweet that even children would look on and smile." -- "Wanting to Die" by Anne Sexton Adversity Builds character. - Japanese Proverb "'Even a fool has one talent'.....darn, I'm not even a fool." - My sister, the master of cunning wit |
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mickel2995 Junior Member
since 2000-05-24
Posts 48 |
This is great, good use of vocabulay words! Micale |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
A smile equivalent to million watts radiance That line reminds me of someone so much, I love it . I love entire poem. It is filled with so much love, and the ending was great. It caught me off guard, too. Great Job .~Susie "If we could read the secret history of our enemies, we should find in each man's life sorrow and suffering enough to disarm all hostility." ~Henry Wadsworth Longfellow "Driftwood" |
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Novacaine For The Soul Member
since 2000-05-26
Posts 122New Orleans |
dear amazon lover, this is beautiful... i particularly like the final line... very moving... the poem started becoming a bit too cliche for my tastes around the second stanza, but you pulled it out far better than i expected with those final lines... good work... sincerely, a sad tomato you're such a beautiful freak... i wish there were more just like you... |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
I for one, thought it was wonderful! very well written! keep it up!  Love Always~*~Jessica~*~  "Love is the product of our discontentment with ourselves." "Bleeding hearts release tears of fire" "work like you don't need money, love like you've never been hurt,and live everyday as if it's your last" |
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Kandi Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354North of Hell |
Wow! I'm practically in awe...that was just so good! You are very talented! To be honest I haven't found anyone whom that poem reminds me of, but you've described perfectly what I think all of us are searching for. I'm new to the forum and I can't believe how talented all of you are! I look forward to reading more from all of the authors here at passions! ~~Kris/Kandi~~ ~I don't want to be everything to everyone... I just want to be something to someone. |
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