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Kandi Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354North of Hell |
Have you ever had one of those perfect days where you feel like you let people in and for just that one day you were your real, true self? That's what this poem is based on. I don't know if it will make sense to anyone else though...my abstract work never seems to come out sounding the way I want it to and I should probably fix this up a little bit but oh well...I just wrote it and am eager to hear your opinions so I'll just let it be. This is not my usual quality of work but we all have our bad days...hope you like it. PS - Everyone please pray for Allysa and her friend and her friend's family...they really need it right now. Remember Today Remember right now For this moment in time I'm letting you in. This is me Forget my yesterdays For some years ago I built up my walls and have been living there for far too long That's not who I am Or what I want to be I don't want to shut out the world And seclude myself I was so wrong But somehow you managed to break through my shield Because I'm saying things I never thought I'd have the nerve to say again. And I hope you were listening and listening well Because you can't ask me tomorrow I don't know if I can stay until then. Because it's sad but true That when you live alone For most of your life Alone becomes the only way you know how to be Don't talk, don't think Don't you cry for me now Because in a second it all could end and for you to remember is the only way Nothing else matters If you'll hold on somehow Forget what will be and what was then Forget everything else Just remember today. ~*Things you see the way you see them will never be seen again*~ ~All that I have found in reason is reason just to not believe.~ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This poem was great. But i am my true self all the time. Sometimes i'll filter my moods for my own protection, or not let people into my heart, but i'm always acting like myself. It's not a mask i wear, its a shield i bear. So yea, but this poem was great. keep it up!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
very good poem  keep it up ~*Pixie*~ |
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Kandi Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354North of Hell |
Dopey - I kinda figured you don't hold urself back lol That's really good to know - don't lose that quality. Thanx for the kind words Pixie - thank you so much for checking out the poem and for replying...I appreciate it  ~*Things you see the way you see them will never be seen again*~ ~All that I have found in reason is reason just to not believe.~ |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I don't know why I never even got to reading this one. I'm glad now that i did for this is probably one of the best one's written in passions. You have such talent in you that I don't even know why you can't see it. And you know what, I think I'm the one who should be ashamed to have my poems in the same forum as yours. thanks for the great read BRAVO!!! I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
"That when you live alone For most of your life Alone becomes the only way you know how to be" Wow... this is a very impressive piece. I've never experienced the "perfect day" that you describe here, but you give me a great picture of what it must be. Thanks for sharing. "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I absolutely LOVED this poem...and i love those kinda days that you speak of. I wish i had more of them though...N e wayz great poem hun!! |
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Kandi Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354North of Hell |
Thanx guys for replying... Acire - thanks for believing in me and for the long talks...you're beautiful! LoveBug - I truly appreciate ur kind words...you'll find your perfect day. ShugarHigh - Thanx hun your a sweety I think we all could use more good days!Love u all Kristin ~*Things you see the way you see them will never be seen again*~ ~Won't you come and hold my hand? This world has taken me as far as it can...witho |
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niceguy Member
since 2000-11-13
Posts 113Sapello, NM, USA |
Kandi this poem was really powerful! I don't think that this needs work at all...it's good how it is. That poem really spoke to me. I'm adding this one to my favorites for sure. Keep writing Kandi. Your really good! "Don't take love for granted...once it's gone, it hurts." |
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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
There is no future, and no yesterday. There is only the present and what we make of it now. Great poem, everyday I try to be true to myself but sometimes I let things get in the way and shut that person off. Excellent reminder of how we should feel to ourselves. Don't fix this up, It's perfect the way it is. jason I'm not concieted...I'm convinced. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Kandi, I think you did a great job on this one, it's written well "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Kandi Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354North of Hell |
Hey guys...thank you so much for all your kind words....means much to me Kandi ~*Things you see the way you see them will never be seen again*~ ~Won't you come and hold my hand? This world has taken me as far as it can... wit |
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PureM Junior Member
since 2000-11-23
Posts 22London, UK |
This is an incredible poem Kandi. I know someone just like this, and you are so right when you speak about having to remember, because she hardly ever shows that side of her character to me...I'm just grateful I got the chance to be there when she opened up to me! Thanks for this, it's really inspiring, you have true talent..and if this is a bad day, then please tell me when you have writen a poem you are really pleased with! I wouldn't want to miss that! Take care, Mat |
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~*~PrettyGirly~*~ Member
since 2000-11-04
Posts 83Fitchburg Ma Usa |
Good poem your friend ~*~Minna~*~  If I could walk I'd be glad..But I'm glad the way I am- ~*~me~*~ |
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