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The Dial-up Let Downs (Dedicated to Child of the Stars)
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The Dial-up Let Downs (Dedicated to Child of the Stars) |
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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
The Dial-up Let downs If I could peer into her eyes, I’d see that look of uncertainty, Of not really wanting to die, But not really wanting to continue, Living this lie, Why she walked slowly, Across a big floor, And she thought, “There’s really nothing here, That wasn’t here before”, And for one fleeting moment, She said “I think I’m happy.” “But I’m sure it’ll pass”. It’s all in the fact, That nothing good, ever lasts, And you can’t fight demons that don’t die, Or the moment the asphalt hits the glass, With so many things in her past, It gets so hard to avoid the broken glass, With every step of the way, She thinks maybe getting cut, Would take all her pain away, I tell her it be a waste, Yeah, such a disgrace, So much of life she has to taste, So many things to face, I can’t make, Her displeasures erased, Too solemn my disgrace, But help, Cause I’m getting incased, In her frozen tears, Drifting slowly through cyberspace. ---------------------------------- THERE IS NO SPOON! Spreading insanity, one post at a time Singing, "If i die before i wake..." |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
All I can possibly say is WOW!! what a wonderful(as usual) post!!! I can only say, please my friend, keep it up!! And you say this is dedicated to Child Of The Stars...I hope this isn't a personal story!!! To both of you, keep your heads up and keep writing!! Love ya both < !signature-->Love Always ~*~Jessica~*~  If aLl My FrIeNdS JuMpEd OfF a BrIdGe, I WoUlDn'T JuMp WiTH ThEm BeCaUsE I'd Be At ThE bOtToM tO CaTcH ThEm. [This message has been edited by StarPryncess17 (edited 09-17-2000).] |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Well what am I supposed to say.....*sniff* made me cry... I think I'm gonna be okay so don't mind me...I am happy...it's for real...I hope...no more frozen tears for you to worry about... Shoot for the moon. Even if you miss, you'll land among the stars. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Deranger~~~Even with the addiction to altoids you are truely amazing...This was an amazing piece of work... ~*If I was to die & could be 1 thing I would be a tear born in your eyes live on your cheeks and die on your lips*~ |
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Crystalina123 Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 228 |
Derranger -- I absolutely loved this poem. THis has so much imagery that I could truly see the picture you were painting. Good job. Crystal |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Sweet of you to dedicate this to child. Awwwwwww  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Deranger: love the poem. Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see. |
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Kandi Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354North of Hell |
Oh my goodness! I love all poetry, but it takes a lot to really move me and this, my friend, moved me almost to tears...it is soo beautiful! Out of everything I've read here at the forum in the past several months, this is easily in my top 5. You have an AMAZING way with words and expression. I absolutely love it! KEEP WRITING! It would be a crime if you ever stop! ~KRis~ ~*Things you see the way you see them will never be seen again*~ ~All that I have found in reason is reason just to not believe.~ |
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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
StarPryncess17: Aww…shucks …No, it’s not my story…And I’ll keep writing until the day they finally lock me up! Child of the Stars: Sorry, didn’t mean to make you cry…And you don’t have to say anything. Silence is beauty. ERIN: Hey, it’s not an addiction, it’s an augmentation! Hehe… Crystalina123: Why thank you, I strive to amaze…hehe Dopey_Dope: Well, I’m just one of those “nice guys”…shame we finish last? But at least we can feel good about it… Allysa:  Kandi: I’m shocked! Ouch. The top five? Wow. And don’t worry, I won’t get arrested for that crime…hehe In-wishing-there-were-more-people-like-you-guys-in-the-world THERE IS NO SPOON! Spreading insanity, one post at a time Singing, "If i die before i wake..." |
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
hmmm...yes...good poem...brought tears to my eyes as well, only not for the same reasons I bet. **I didn't loose my mind it was mine to give away** ~Robbie Williams~ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I really like this, I dont know why I missed it the first time! great job |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Hey this is great!! It's really sweet. I love the rhyme scheme. You have a lot of talent, keep it up Bel |
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HerMelness Junior Member
since 2000-07-12
Posts 37Bridgewater, NS, Canada |
I'm so in love with this poem. Marry me? This is fabulous. I'm envious of your talent! And the Spoon thing.. well that just perfected it =) -Wherever you go, go with all your heart.- |
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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
Wow! Thanks everybody! In-wishing-i-had-a-spoon-for-every-nice-thing-you-guys-say THERE IS NO SPOON! Spreading insanity, one post at a time "Way back in eighty-seven, where we bust rockstands till we get to heaven" |
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