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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
Step on board to feel the sun there's something inside that'll make you run sing your freedom song in a stir the hypnotic waves will add to the lure Like the child that is sugarless forgotten bliss will rise into a hiss we can walk upon the precious water loud cheers and experience will be the coming of the daughter the ocean floats outside of time step to the boat to block out the whine the ocean sings of tragic falls step on the boat and you'll learn why we called Our Mother has made her final entrance dressed with stars and always tent-less eccentric wind blows through our minds pebbles are dropped for the first time the sails are a sailing and we're ready to blow this night of mystery has but one length to go one night that would break off from previous death leaves you with bliss and a loss of your breath the ocean floats in other worlds this is my boat that can give you pearls the ocean sleeps in serenity we should rest to fore now we are free Now night arrives with her purple legions Retire now to your tents & to your dreams Tomorrow we enter the town of my birth I want to be ready. - JM |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Very intresting...Such a choice of words!!!I like it...You have a way with the words...Keep it up!!!  ~*If I was to die & could be 1 thing I would be a tear born in your eyes live on your cheeks and die on your lips*~ |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Very nice Anomaly! Beautifully descriptive piece ... well done!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
I like this. Very good choice of words. I read somewhere that you're a ninth grader??? Do you ever feel like me, really young??? Well, I was just wondering. B/c most of the ppl's poems I read are in like college, or somethin. Well, I'm gonna shut up now. Bye. Allysa Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see. |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
~*~Anomaly~*~ < !signature-->A very well worded post! As always, I enjoyed reading! Your words show an excellent personaltiy and imagination. I know for a fact, I could never write as well as you do I admire that, so keep it up! Love Always ~*~Jessica~*~ If aLl My FrIeNdS JuMpEd OfF a BrIdGe, I WoUlDn'T JuMp WiTH ThEm BeCaUsE I'd Be At ThE bOtToM tO CaTcH ThEm. [This message has been edited by StarPryncess17 (edited 09-15-2000).] |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
this might be the first time a moderator took a look!!....maybe anyway...thakn you all for responding and liking the poem...and allysa i am in ninth grade..heh but i don't feel to young..it also helps that i look 3 or 4 years older than i am..but we are all here to write so don't feel young...we're equals around here.. Now night arrives with her purple legions Retire now to your tents & to your dreams Tomorrow we enter the town of my birth I want to be ready. - JM |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I'm no equal! haha. OK anyway anomaly, you know i loved this. This sounds like something i'd write. I think you are slowly copying my style mentally, either that or im copying yours. Either way, i think its cool. I loved it, great poem!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
dope maybe it's just we are always on paths to better our skills..you once said i reminded you of yourself when you were in ninth..we're alike...good enough explanation. "'I am the the lizard king I can do anything I can make the earth stop in its tracks I made the blue cars go away |
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