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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
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As you take to the tempest skies And fly off to your home Remember how I used to be Not how I am now... alone As you go to the beautiful land That stole your love from me Know that I am weeping now Tears you’ll never see As you go off to a land Where it is still daylight There’s one thing that you should know I’m dreaming of you tonight Will you ever dream of me In the moon’s dim light When the stars are twinkling Before Apollo’s chariot flight If you ever think of me Know that I’m thinking of you And I’m wishing you the very best In everything you do I hope that no one does to you What you’ve done to me I used to pray each night for you But it wasn’t meant to be I hope you never feel the things That you made me feel But, despite of everything The love I felt was real So, as I see the sun arise And the day’s first light I go to bed, and wonder What you’re dreaming of tonight "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Beautifully written! And I'm not just saying that so you'll free me.....I love this.  |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Very noble words, my co-world dominator. A gorgeous, flowing piece of work here. Well done!  (and we'll never free the deVine one!)*Krista Knutson* "Cherish your vision; Cherish your ideals; Cherish the music that stirs in your heart, the beauty that forms in your mind, the loveliness that drapes your purest thoughts. If you remain true to them, your world will at last be built." ~James Allen~ "We've made houses for hatred...it's time we made a place where people's souls may be seen and made safe"...~Jewel~ |
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Dusk Treader
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since 1999-06-18
Posts 1187St. Paul, MN |
A love strong enough for you to give him away, very noble... A wonderful piece, Erica, I enjoyed it much! Abrahm Simons "Keep on dreamin' boy 'cause when you stop dreaming it's time to die" - Blind Melon |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
oh wow this is a beautiful poem. i seems like even though this guy messed with you feelings you still care about him. thats a suprise for me at least. i would still care but it would change my look at the way i see guys. honestly i hope you get this poem in the book. i would really like to read a poem alot like this if i didnt have online and was looking for books of poems. |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
i love the piece and everything but, i just have one question for you did he die if so its so sad hope your hanging in there if this did happen to you. I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
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PDV- Thanks bunches! But you're still in my cluches... but I might sneak some un-flavored chips in to you sometime! Alwye- Thank you for your kind words Dusk Trader- Thank you, my fellow dictator! Erin- Thank you so much! Jeremiah- Thank you for your reply. No, he didn't die, he just left. But I'm glad that this poem can say diffrent things to diffrent people. "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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Crystalina123 Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 228 |
Erica, I really like this poem and I feel really bad for you. Completely unsolicited advice here, it does get better. Someday you'll look back on this situation and thank God for it b/c it has made you a stronger person. Until then it'll just hurt like **ll. I am so sorry hon, E-mail me if you ever want to talk. My heart goes out to you. Love, Crystal Maybe God has us meet a few wrong people so that when we meet the right one we can truly appreciate the gift. |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
This is a wonderful poem Lovebug! Your words are very touching, I too know of the pain you are feeling. But time will heal your heart and with the healing of your heart comes new chances for love. I wish you the best of luck! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~ ~*~Love is the product of our dicontentment with ourselves~*~ ~*~SMILE! It makes your butt shine!~*~ |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
You know, this is the first time I've ever been in this forum  Rest assured it will NOT be the last I really didn't think the poetry in here would be this great, but, boy was I ever wrong So, as I see the sun arise And the day’s first light I go to bed, and wonder What you’re dreaming of tonight Very well written!!! All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
Erica, This is beautiful..but sad. I'm sorry for your situation but I'm very happy such beautiful poems can come from it. I hope it ends up in the book too .~Susie "If we could read the secret history of our enemies, we should find in each man's life sorrow and suffering enough to disarm all hostility." ~Henry W |
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Lani_DarkOne Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 152UK |
Beautiful and so deep...also full of sadness but with that spark of hope that'll keep you going. Your tears will pass...keep at it. "You could be my unintended Choice, to live my life extended...." Muse "Even when we're apart we'll still be under the same sky," LJ Smith "Hiding in the musty attic is Elusive She sits, cross legged in a midst dark cobwebs Several forms scurry to seek shelter Beneath her levitating shadow. Her back rigid , eyes glassy Gazes intently at time escaping Sliding, smoothly, as sand sprinkles Through the hour glass, A single tear grazes her misty cheek." Lani |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
This just seeps with feeling...so sad, but with a quiet strength to continue. Wonderful poem. |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Lovely, Erica!! Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
This is so delicately tender and touching Lovebug ... really beautifully written! Best wishes, /Kit |
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LoveAll Member
since 2000-05-24
Posts 148B'dale, USA |
This poem was just magical and well written. I can feel your hurt also. I love it! "Of all those arts in which the wise excel, Nature's chief masterpiece is writing well." ~Essay on Poetry, John Sheffield "Those who trust in the Lord will renew their strength. They will soar on wings like eagles; run and not grow weary, walk and not be faint." ~Isaiah 40:3 |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Excellently written Lovebug, truly one of your best |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
great poem!!! hit me right in the heart for we're in exactly the same situation. LOVED IT A LOT |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Dreaming can help us through some very difficult times in our lives. This was beautifully written Erica. Thanks for allowing me the pleasure of reading it. When you are old and grey and full of sleep, And nodding by the fire, take down this book, And slowly read, and dream of the soft look Your eyes had once, and of their shodows deep; How many loved your moments of glad grace, And loved your beauty with love false or true, But one man loved the pilgrim soul in you, And loved the sorrows of your changing face... William Butler Yeats |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
wow....really passionate and great! hope to read much more... |
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Chel Senior Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 511Baltimore, MD, USA |
Hey there Erica, I really liked this poem, and after I scrolled down to post a reply I reading the others, I had forgotten what I wanted to say. This piece was beautiful. I am just sorry of the outcome. Keep your head up. Chel "True friends stab you in the front" "True love last forever" |
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Isabelle Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 176Indiana |
This poem was beautiful. I hope this poem really gets into the book. I know that i voted for you. Keep the writing you obviously have the talent. Jeanna "Poetry is the music of the souls, and above all, of great and feeling souls." ~Voltaire~ |
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The_Driven Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 60 |
I must say that this is a well written poem. Very good job, and keep up the great work. |
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thug-a-licious Junior Member
since 2000-08-08
Posts 27 |
Lovebug, this is a very touching and heartfelt poem, I liked it a whole lot! I hope that your pain will soon be healed! Time will heal your broken heart I promise. Keep up the beautiful poetry and I hope to see more of it! All my love Alexis |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
This outdoes everything when it comes to sweetness. My heart skipped a beat by reading this poem. Love this poem!!! I'll read it again and again and leave as many replies to it for everytime I read it more emotions come out < !signature--> As i wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR [This message has been edited by acire (edited 08-08-2000).] |
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*ChrisLover* Junior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 46erie, colo |
hey there love bug!!! thats wasa great poem!! i was in the same situation once!! but i kept my head up high and now im back with the same guy! i m VERY Happy too!! i ued to cry my elf to sleep wondering if he'd ever come to his snsces and come back to me .. and he did!!! so just keep you rhead up... and think clear... maybe the same wil happen for you or you'll find someone beter than him.. i know that you may not wantto hear that you may find someone better cuz thats like the last thing on earth you want to hear but its the truth!! well i g2g i hope to see more of you work in here!! love janette Everything happens for a reason.. sometimes it's bad, but sometime it's good!! just remeber there's people out here who care! |
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