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Virgin Suïcide Member
since 2000-08-11
Posts 319Netherlands |
I'll try to be What you will see In me is just A face of scars Inside with me All words will come And go outside The pain in here Is just a facet Of life of me... ~*~yeha, another "different" poem... this is like really weird I guess~*~  Virgin Suïcide I dream about how it's gonna end Approaching me quickly Living a life of fear I only want my mind to be clear... ~*~silverchair, suicidal dream~*~ |
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Jenabou Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 215Oklahoma/Nova Scotia Canada/USA |
This was very well expressed it wasn't weird it's unique i really like it great work  Love Ya Bunches ~Jen~  The world is like a mirror; frown at it, and it frowns at you. Smile and it smiles, too Be kind,for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I like this too, great job on it!  |
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Lani_DarkOne Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 152UK |
Yep...it's pretty unique, and I enjoyed reading every word of it..(though unhappiness seeps from the page)but that's good.. Keep posting  "Controlling my feelings for too long.... And forcing our darkest souls to unfold... And pushing us into self-destruction...." *~Muse*~ |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Virgin Suicide~ what an emotion filled poem! I enjoyed this one a lot!! I don't think it's weird! Poetry is what you make of it. It is yours from your heart, now how can that be weird?! Keep 'em coming firl I love to read 'em! Love Always ~*~Jessica~*~< !signature--> If aLl My FrIeNdS JuMpEd OfF a BrIdGe, I WoUlDn'T JuMp WiTH ThEm BeCaUsE I'd Be At ThE bOtToM tO CaTcH ThEm. [This message has been edited by StarPryncess17 (edited 09-09-2000).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked the poem. Short, and simple. Good feeling. Anyway StarPryncess.....your little Jumping off a bridge thing makes no sense. If you were at the bottom to catch all your friends while they plunge to their deaths, they'd just end up falling ontop of you. Your bones would crush, viens burst, and all of your cerebral fluids would flow into this puddle of blood and feces. It would be a sick sight. Eneh Weh! Just another perspective of your positivity! Thought i'd be fun to share!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Virgin Suïcide Member
since 2000-08-11
Posts 319Netherlands |
To all: thank you SOOOOOO much!!!  I just thought this was like TO weird.... Never thought you'd like it! and Dopey_Dope: ARGH!!!!! don't be so  ...... hehe.....love, Vrigin Suïcide...< !signature--> I dream about how it's gonna end Approaching me quickly Living a life of fear I only want my mind to be clear... ~*~silverchair, suicidal dream~*~ [This message has been edited by Virgin Suïcide (edited 09-09-2000).] |
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Lucius Cade Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 235Saskatchewan |
This had some really good flow to it. The pain in here Is just a facet Of life of me... thats my favorite part Lucidity is the answer to all problems |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Virgin~~~Can I borrow your mind for a night???Then just maybe I would be able to write so many poems on all different things... Dopey~~~I was born myself, raised myself what a quote for you!!!So how did you raise yourself did you change your own diapers???If you dont have anything nice to say...Dont say it at all...Keep your comments to yourself... Sorry about that Virgin...He just always have to have a comment about everything!!! ~*YoU cAn CoMpLaIn CuZ rOsEs HaVe ThOrNs Or ReJoIcE cUz ThOrNs HaVe RoSeS*~ |
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UNC STAR Member
since 2000-06-19
Posts 67Hinesville,Ga,USA |
That poem was real unique. Keep up the good work. Thanks for the reply. Love,STAR |
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Virgin Suïcide Member
since 2000-08-11
Posts 319Netherlands |
Thank you Lucius Cade and UNC STAR!!! and ERIN: I'd be happy to loose it for a while!! And Dopey_Dope, guess he's ok!! so nhf about him... love, Virgin Suïcide... I dream about how it's gonna end Approaching me quickly Living a life of fear I only want my mind to be clear... ~*~silverchair, suicidal dream~*~ |
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