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The Only Way ( Beware) |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico 
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Yes well this is not such a good poem in my eyes. I am just putting it here because ALL these poems you have seen are from my 3rd Batch collection. Poems that I wrote as a 9th grade. I am a senior now...much better writer , but im not letting you see the new ones yet (4th wave..10th...5th cycle..11th....6th round...NOW).....because i want you to appreciate my early stylez and then i'll flow you all into my new pieces of work. But this one is depressing, a subject i havent yet toked into. Here you go: The Only Way: I try to help, I try to see I try to do, and I try to be. Yet what can I be with my future unknown, With no direction or sign to be shown. I'm the "thing" in "nothing" and "no" are the answers I get. What's the point of living or dying? It's all a loose loose bet. I give up helping, I give up seeing I give up doing, and I give up being. All I'm going to do is sit in my chair Because I hate the fact that life isn't fair. So here I lay till the end of it all. Ever since I was born I started my fall Till I reached the hour of this awful day. To be dying in my chair is the only way.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Wow. You may not believe that was good, but it was. You don't seem like the humble type, so maybe you really don't like it! But congrats.. good job. How old are you? Senior in high school? or college? Well, again well done. Jenn |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
HI yes jenn, thanks for the compliment. Uhhhh....i am a senior in highscool. Good ol' 17yr old. I was a freshman in college at Penn State University this summer and took courses in journalism and philosophy....but that was for only 2 months. Now im back to tiny tot highschool. oh well! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
This was a pretty nice piece. I like the style you put into it, very nice. Journalism eh? That's my major in a few years!  Good luck!Salma |
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MoonPrincess Junior Member
since 2000-07-17
Posts 29Wisconsin, USA |
Hey there, Dopey, that was a very good poem, whether you think so or not... I liked it a lot... Keep up the good work.. Love, Kristi "Love begins with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear." |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Hey Dopey! I like this, it's really true. It kinda describes how I feel, but I didn't realize that until I read this. Anyhow, I like this, can't wait to read more. Whatever. Allysa Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see. |
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Virgin Suïcide Member
since 2000-08-11
Posts 319Netherlands |
Hey! really liked your poem! yours are like really clear or so.... love, Virgin Suïcide... "I love the way you love, but I hate the way, I'm supposed to love you back..." Love is hard to live... Try to live life in love.... |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
Dopey_Dope*~ Hey! yet again, another wonderful poem i love your work! oh and ya know that girl Suga_Baby? i knew you had been chatting with her and stuff adn i wanted you to know she and i are best friends keep up wiht the great work Luv ~*Pixie*~ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I really liked how you started this one, great job on it. I can't wait to see the poems from other years! "I try to help, I try to see I try to do, and I try to be." |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Yes well thank you for all the compliments. I will post more up soon enuff...patience is a virtue....adios I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
this was really written with emotion...anyway i think so...i am a 9th grader now and i basically relate to everything in your poem..keep coming with old poems.. "Serve the servants- oh no. That legendary divorce is such a bore" "i'm on warm milk and laxatives/cherry-flavored antacids" |
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Jose Marti Member
since 2000-07-01
Posts 374washing DC |
wow, this is a great poem. I haven't been around for the last few days, but this is a great poem to greet my return. |
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miriam Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 323glendale,ca. |
are you sure this is 9th. grade work??? it's really good. up to the top it goes once more. miriam coronado |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Dopey~~~I dont know how but I passed this up...It is really good...I think its just perfect...Damn do you have some talent... "Because the fact that life isnt fair" I like that part...Only because its so true...But it will always stay that way...Keep up the good work!!! ~*YoU cAn CoMpLaIn CuZ rOsEs HaVe ThOrNs Or ReJoIcE cUz ThOrNs HaVe RoSeS*~ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Wow thanks Erin. I loved what you said. To all the others, thanks!!! I really love the posts you all put up. To the girl who asked if this was 9th grade material......yes, this is a part of my 3rd Bath.......written throughout the time of: Jan-Aug of 1998 So second semester 9th, and Summer into 10th. So yea Im glad you liked!! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Lani_DarkOne Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 152UK |
Nice poem..keep posting  "Controlling my feelings for too long.... And forcing our darkest souls to unfold... And pushing us into self-destruction...." *~Muse*~ |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey dopey. I really liked this...definitely a poem that made me think...about myself..thanks for sharing it... ~carly Shoot for the moon. Even if you miss, you'll land among the stars. |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
While I enjoyed your poem, I did not enjoy your disparaging comments to my quote on Virgin Suicide's poem. You always seem to find someth9ing negative with everything possible. If there's ever a shot for you to take on someone, you do. I have been nice to you and said nice things about your talent also. Why you would sit there and say the things to me that you did is beyond me and angers me a lot!! You have no place to say anything about me or anything having to do with me. I do want you to know that your frequently opinionated comments are always frowned upon because they are so negative. In the future...keep your mouth shut!!< !signature--> If aLl My FrIeNdS JuMpEd OfF a BrIdGe, I WoUlDn'T JuMp WiTH ThEm BeCaUsE I'd Be At ThE bOtToM tO CaTcH ThEm. [This message has been edited by StarPryncess17 (edited 09-09-2000).] |
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LiL'Kay Junior Member
since 2000-09-09
Posts 21Canada |
hey! you got some cool talent keep it up and good luck in the future that comes! later LiL'Kay [This message has been edited by LiL'Kay (edited 09-09-2000).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
oops hehehe starpryncess it was a joke. Geesh haha....people get so mad at nothing. J.O.K.E. Yes well anyway thanks for all the compliments. Lovin every moment of it! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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