Teen Poetry #3 |
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when the time comes |
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Le Capitan de L'Amour Member
since 2000-07-15
Posts 60 |
When the time comes to love you feel the most incredible things in your life, like butterflies in your stomach, nervous and happy imaginative and poetic, this things combined makes everyone happy, when this time comes to an end you feel sorrow unwanted by everyone in this moment i look for an alternative to my sorrow and discord to the world, i try to find comfort on the arms of my mother, but when the time to love comes again you forget the person that helped you in the worst of your moments that Why i want to state that woman are the best thing that god created for those single, sorrow moments that any man has when he gets dumped into the garbage of lonelyness |
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Jenabou Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 215Oklahoma/Nova Scotia Canada/USA |
this was really good its very true wonderful use of words great work Love Ya Bunches ~Jen~ ![]() ![]() ![]() The world is like a mirror; frown at it, and it frowns at you. Smile and it smiles, too Be kind,for everyone you meet is fighting a harder battle |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked the topic, and the idea of the poem. Yes we are dumped in this garbage pale of lonliness and sorrow to forever stay there until one fateful, heavenly angel of light comes to be our savior.....preferably one sexy SEXY SEXYYYYY angel....but yea....anyway the poem was nice, but the wording.....it would be tres bien cept for the fact that some words are mispelled. Just tryin to make it flow better. nice jon bud! Au revior ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Le Capitan de L'Amour Member
since 2000-07-15
Posts 60 |
thank you guys for your coments, keep them coming (boost) |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
This was really good!!!But next time you post can you format it different??You dont have to Im just asking cause I always read the same lines over when its in this format...Anyways keep up the good work!!! ~*If I was to die & could be 1 thing I would be a tear born in your eyes live on your cheeks and die on your lips*~ |
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